sPHENIX is a new detector at RHIC.

[Nils Feege <nils.feege AT stonybrook.edu>]

Hi Chong,

the poster looks nice overall! Here a few suggestions for improving it further:

Top box:

- "The sPHENIX: a bridge connects RHIC and future EIC" -> this could read like sPHENIX being only an intermediate stage between RHIC and EIC, maybe something like this conveys the idea better: "sPHENIX: The new experiment at RHIC and (with upgrades) at the future Electron Ion Collider"

- Top left: I'd either remove all reference to STAR here and only leave the red PHENIX label in your PHENIX picture, OR split the image half PHENIX / half STAR

- right: good

- bottom left: "e+p / e+A" -> "First-ever polarized e+p / e+A collider"

"likely to lose...", "Back to DIS..." -> remove these points

Add point "Additional instrumentation: - GEM trackers + EMCal in e-going direction, -Particle ID

Bottom box:

I'd move the "Nuclear PDFs" and "Gluon Saturation" sections to the top and "Longitudinal spin" and "Transverse spin" to the bottom

- Longitudinal spin:

o Title: "Longitudinal spin structure of the proton" 

o "Unique & Precise" -> "Unique and precise"

o "Expect even further constraint..." -> "The EIC will constrain deltaG at smaller x"

- Transverse spin:

o Title: "Transverse spin phenomena in the proton" 

o "Competing & Contradicting" -> "Competing and contradicting"

- Nuclear PDFs:

o Study on initial conditions of HI... -> Study the initial conditions of the Heavy Ion nucleus...

"but suffer the nuclear effect" -> "but suffering from nuclear effects in the final state"

o" a knowledge cannot be predicted by pQCD" -> "No pQCD prediction"

o is effect in CNM persistent in higher... -> Effect in CNM persistent at higher...

-Gluon Saturation:

o "Allow precise theoretical expectation" -> "Precise test of theoretical expectations"

o "PDFs' growth" -< "Growth of PDFs"

Please update the draft and circulate the new version.

-Nils 

On Tue, Jan 31, 2017 at 6:22 PM, Chong Kim <ckim.phenix AT gmail.com> wrote:

Hi,

I'm sorry for late circulation. The title of poster is as follows:
"Studying Proton Structure, the Partonic Structure of Nuclei, and Hadronization at sPHENIX"

Any comment or suggestion including English is very welcome.

Have a good day.
Chong

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