sPHENIX is a new detector at RHIC.

[Xiaochun He <xhe AT gsu.edu>]

Dear Dennis,

Thanks for taking the lead of this important task.

Here are my brief comments:

1. Page i (Executive Summary), line 10, remove "qualitatively"
2. Revise the second paragraph of "Executive Summary"
3. Page ii, line 49, remove "Beam Use Proposal"
4. Piii, L2"overview" -> "Overview"
5. Piii, L3 "mission" -> "Mission"
6. Piii, L4 "performance measures" -> "Performance Highlights"
7. Piii, L25 "trackers" -> "Tracker"
8. P1, L54 "qualitative" ->"quantitative" (?)
9. P2, from L66 to 70. Rewrite these sentences and reflect the present status.
10. P3, L92 remove "The"?
11. L119 and L120 There are three "others" in two lines. Rewrite this sentence maybe using "rest" ...
12. L124: "MIE" -> "DOE MIE"
13. L167: This photo shows a test of outer tiles. Move it to L151? 
14. L204:  "Chapter" -> "chapter, "
15. L219: "Chapter C" -> "Appendix C"
16. L222: "The first year 2023 of running" -> "The first year of running in 2023"
17. L232: "The second year of running in 2024" 
18. L279: "up-time" -> "uptime" (make a global change)
19. Move the Table 2.2, 2.3, 2.4, 2.5 captions to the top of the tables, in others too.
20. L309: "~1.5"
21. L416: "New considerations" -> "New Considerations" 
22. L445: use QGP 
23. L446: "Between 2023 and 2025" -> "From 2023 to 2025"
24. L475: Itemizing the following three paragraphs. Looks better and clear
25. L575: use QGP
26. L755: Revise the first sentence. Maybe "The detector installation is expected to be completed ..."
27. It is good to have an updated number of participants and institutions near the end of the summary.
28.  

Cheers,

Xiaochun

Xiaochun He

Regents Professor

Department of Physics & Astronomy

Georgia State University

Atlanta, GA 30303

Email: xhe AT gsu.edu

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Sent: Saturday, May 7, 2022 2:02 PM
To: sphenix-l AT lists.bnl.gov <sphenix-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
Subject: [Sphenix-l] Draft BUP 2022 for Collaboration Review

 

Dear sPHENIX colleagues,

I have posted an internal, line-numbered draft of our Beam Use Proposal 2022 in the Indico area used for yesterday’s BUP discussion. You can find a direct link here: 

https://indico.bnl.gov/event/15682/contributions/63109/attachments/40862/68320/sPHENIX_Beam_Use_Proposal_2022_InternalDRAFT.pdf 

We welcome any comments from the Collaboration by Wednesday, May 11th, with a plan to then submit an updated document to the ALD and PAC on Friday, May 13th. Comments sent in thread to the list or to myself privately are both OK.

Thank you to the TG Conveners and individual analyzers, the Commissioning Task Force, and many of you for very useful discussions and help with physics projections and document preparation.

Looking forward to your comments, 

Dennis

Dennis V. Perepelitsa

Assistant Professor, Physics Department

University of Colorado Boulder