STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Eugenia Khyzhniak <eugenia.sh.el AT gmail.com>]

Dear Hanna,

I've updated color of the exponential fits: https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/nucleus2020_1.pdf

Best regards,

Eugenia

вт, 20 окт. 2020 г. в 13:08, Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>:

Eugenia,

I don’t want to argue as for none of us English is a mother language.

Leave them as you want or ask English native speaker to correct your text.

About plot: I am just confused as you use the same color for both fits. Just now I see you plot both.

To avoid other’s confusion please change one of the colors.

Thanks,

Hanna

 

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

PhD DSc Eng, Professor WUT

E-mail: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl

Tel: +48 22 234 5851 (office)

Address:

Warsaw University of Technology

Faculty of Physics

Nuclear Physics Division

Koszykowa 75

Office: 117b (via 115)

00-662 Warsaw, Poland

Wiadomość napisana przez Eugenia Khyzhniak <eugenia.sh.el AT gmail.com> w dniu 20.10.2020, o godz. 11:58:

Dear Hanna,

Thank you for the comments!
I've updated my proceedings: https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/nucleus2020_1.pdf

The following sentences I would like to leave as they were before. Could you
please clarify why do you think it is better to change it (if you
insist to change them)?

>We present dependence of the invariant radii on pair transverse momentum at
>the different charged particle multiplicity per event. → We present the
>invariant radii's dependence on pair transverse momentum at the differently
>charged particle multiplicity per event.

>In the collider, during the readout of the event in the gas volume of the TPC,
>several collisions may occur which may lead to the pile-up. → In the collider,
>during the readout of the event in the TPC's gas volume, several collisions
>may occur, which may lead to the pile-up.

>The upper value of the momentum cut was chosen based on the maximum possible
>value allowing the reasonable separation of pions and kaons in TPC. → The
>momentum cut's upper value was chosen based on the maximum possible value
>allowing the reasonable separation of pions and kaons in TPC

>Femtoscopy can be used to extract the space-time characteristics of the
>particle emitting source which is created in the p+p, p+A or A+A collisions
>[1–4]. → Femtoscopy can extract the particle emitting source's space-time
>characteristics created in the p+p, p+A, or A+A collisions [1–4].

>Track merging occurs when two tracks close to each other in the TPC and
>reconstructed as one due to the fusion of the ionization cluster. → Track
>merging occurs when two tracks close to each other in the TPC and
>reconstructed as one due to the ionization cluster's fusion.

>The radii increase with increasing multiplicity, as one would expect from the
>collisions' simple geometric picture.

I'm not sure which line the next comment refers to.
>different charged particle → differently charged particle
Perhaps you meant this sentence: "The dependence of the invariant radii on pair transverse
momentum at the different charged particle multiplicity is presented." If so,
then I think this comment may completely change the meaning of this sentence. Could
you please clarify what do you mean?

Could you please clarify what do you mean by the next comment?
>Figure 1: replace this plot with this including Lorenzian’s fits too.
In the Fig. 1 (a, b) I show the Gaussian assumption and in Fig. 1 (c, d) -
Lorenzian. Do you want me to change preliminary plots?


Best regards,
Eugenia

пн, 19 окт. 2020 г. в 13:51, Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk via Star-cf-l <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov>:

Dear Eugenia,

Please find below comments on your nice proceedings:

 Abstract:

spatial → the spatial

femtscopic → femtoscopic

We present dependence of the invariant radii on pair transverse momentum at the different charged particle multiplicity per event.

→ We present the invariant radii's dependence on pair transverse momentum at the differently charged particle multiplicity per event.

Introduction:

The quantum statistics → quantum statistics

Femtoscopy can be used to extract the space-time characteristics of the particle emitting source which is created in the p+p, p+A or A+A collisions [1–4]. → Femtoscopy can extract the particle emitting source's space-time characteristics created in the p+p, p+A, or A+A collisions [1–4].

The femtoscopic radii, extracted from these correlations, describe the emission source at the moment of kinetic freeze-out which is the last stage of particle interactions. → The femtoscopic radii, extracted from these correlations, describe the emission source at the moment of kinetic freeze-out, which is the last particle interaction stage.

show the presence → show

different charged particle → differently charged particle

than has all experimental → with all experimental

Analysis details

In the collider, during the readout of the event in the gas volume of the TPC, several collisions may occur which may lead to the pile-up. → In the collider, during the readout of the event in the TPC's gas volume, several collisions may occur, which may lead to the pile-up.

The upper value of the momentum cut was chosen based on the maximum possible value allowing the reasonable separation of pions and kaons in TPC. → The momentum cut's upper value was chosen based on the maximum possible value allowing the reasonable separation of pions and kaons in TPC

Also → Also,

analisys→ analysis

Track merging occurs when two tracks close to each other in the TPC and reconstructed as one due to the fusion of the ionization cluster. → Track merging occurs when two tracks close to each other in the TPC and reconstructed as one due to the ionization cluster's fusion.

Influence on correlation function → influence correlation function

Presented on the Fig → presented in the Fig (also other places on the figure → in the figure)

with assumption → , assuming

The another → another

Lorenzian shape and→ Lorenzian shape, and

where correlation function → where the correlation function

to test → for testing

has Gaussian shape → has a Gaussian shape

It is seen that the correlation functions are reasonably described by the fits → It is seen that the fits reasonably describe the correlation functions.

It is seen that the fits reasonably describe the correlation functions. → The radii increase with increasing multiplicity, as one would expect from the collisions' simple geometric picture.

Figure 1: replace this plot with this including Lorenzian’s fits too.

With my best regards,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

PhD DSc Eng, Professor WUT

E-mail: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl

Tel: +48 22 234 5851 (office)

Address:

Warsaw University of Technology

Faculty of Physics

Nuclear Physics Division

Koszykowa 75

Office: 117b (via 115)

00-662 Warsaw, Poland

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