STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Xiaofeng Luo <xfluo.star AT hotmail.com>]

Hi Risa,

    Nice proceedings,
    Please find my comments/suggestions below :

1. In the abstract, the last few sentence, suggest to modify to : "In 
this paper, we present the results of higher-order fluctuations up to 
the sixth-order from p+ p collisions at √ s = 200 GeV. It provides 
precise physics baselines to be compared to Au + Au collisions. The 
positive signs of the fifth- and sixth-order fluctuation in p+p 
collisions are observed and their multiplicity dependence are found to 
connect smoothly to those from Au + Au collisions. "

2. If protons and antiprotons follow Poisson distributions
 -> If protons and antiprotons follow independent Poisson distributions

3. assuming that efficiencies follow binomial distributions
-> assuming that detector responses follow binomial model

4. Page 3, bottom:
  √ sNN 200 GeV
->   √ sNN = 200 GeV


5. Page 4, summary  :
√ s 200 GeV
->   √ s = 200 GeV (some times use √ sNN, please make it consistent in 
the paper)

6. Delete “This could not be the case for p+ p collisions.” In the last 
sentence of summary.

7. Ref. 5, Cn the sign of kurtosis near the QCD critical point -> on the 
sign of kurtosis near the QCD critical point


With those implemented, I sign off.

Thank you,
Best Regards,
Xiaofeng

On 2021/9/10 10:32, Risa Nishitani via Star-cf-l wrote:
> Dear Hanna,
>
> Thank you for your comments.
>
>
> I have revised the proceedings and you can find it in the following link;
>
>
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/56188 
> <https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/56188>
>
>
> Please kindly let me know if you have further comments or suggestions.
>
>
> Best regards,
>
> Risa
>
>
>
>
>
> 2021年9月8日(水) 19:44 Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk via Star-cf-l 
> <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov <mailto:star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov>>:
>
>     Dear Risa,
>
>     Please find below comments to your nice proceedings:
>
>     Abstract:
>     heavy ion -> heavy-ion
>     at 200 GeV -> at \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 200 GeV
>     If you use p+p in the math mode, you should do the same for Au+Au
>     (general comment to the whole draft)
>
>     Introduction:
>     at 200 GeV -> at \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 200 GeV
>
>     Cumulants:
>     Please control numbering of your references, the reference [16]
>     should change the number as it is cited after [6-8]
>
>     Data set:
>     30 (cm) -> 30 cm
>     2 (cm) -> 2 cm
>     1 (cm) -> 1 cm
>
>     Results:
>     at 200 GeV -> at \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 200 GeV
>
>     Summary:
>     at 200 GeV -> at \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 200 GeV (when you refer to Au+Au)
>     at 200 GeV -> at \sqrt{s} = 200 GeV (when you refer to p+p)
>     at 200 GeV -> at \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 200 GeV (when you refer to Au+Au)
>
>     With those implemented I sign off.
>
>     Thanks,
>     Hanna
>
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