STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Grigory Nigmatkulov <nigmatkulov AT gmail.com>]

Dear Hanna,

Thank you very much for your comments. I've updated slides accordingly to your suggestions. Please find responses below.

>You don’t have outline / plan of your talk. This would help to navigate and to orient the audience what to expect from your talk. Please add the outline. 

Added.

>Slide 3: As the audience probably will not be familiar with STAR and RHIC it would be good to add one slide of introduction to the detector. 

>Please mention RHIC and STAR as well, add definition of pseudorapidity or show the meaning of different \eta ranges. Non-expert will not know it.  

I swapped slides 3 and 4. Now slide 3 contains the description of STAR. I also mention RHIC. The equation for eta is added.

>Slide 6: Define v_1 and R_out and R_side. It would also help to understand % in centralities. Simple cartoon that 0-5% means almost full overlap of colliding nuclei and bigger numbers >refer to more and more peripheral collisions would help.

Done

>Slide 7: Having wave function add please that it includes two-particle correlations including QS effects and FSI. Later (slide  9), you can mention it, which explains your last statement >from  the summary (slide 13)

Done

>Slide 8: "..from 7.7 GeV to 2.76 TeV”  - HADES, STAR FXT go even down with \sqrt{s_NN}, change the the lower energy as you show results for lower energies. Please define \lambda >parameter.

Done

>Slide 9: Define k*. 

>Preliminary proton-proton and proton-Xi were withdrawn as they had changed after recalculation. They should not be shown until final publication. Please remove these two figures. 

>Mention that other particle systems are used to study parameters of the strong interaction.

Thank you for the information about withdrawal. Done.

>Slide 10: It would be beneficial if you explain motivation and what we can gain studies other colliding systems. How do you conclude about collective behavior? What do you expect? >Define kT. 

I've added a statement regarding similarity in heavy ion collisions. Equation that describes kT is added.

>Slide 11: Define quantities in the polarization formula P_H

Done.

>Even the session of high energy and elementary particles describes much more beyond heavy ions. I would be beneficial if you include some introduction. You have just QCD phase >diagram but you don’t define anywhere the most relevant observables in context of exploring the QCD phase diagram. This would also help you later to refer to further slides. Please >add the intro part related to key observables, especially as you concentrate on the correlation program mostly that does not answer all BES questions.

Due to the limited amount of time for the talk it will be hard to include extra slide and discuss the field.I believe that I'll be able to discuss it within slide 3.

It is already overloaded and I will have only 12 minutes for everything...

Cheers,

Grigory