STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

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Toshihiro Nonaka ( tnonaka AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Fan Si ( sifan98 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/WHBM-2023/Fluctuation-measurements-RHIC-STAR

Comment:
Dear Fan,

Very nice slides. I have only a few minor comments as follows:

s4: It might be informative to write as "Skellam = Poisson - Poisson = C3/C1  
= ... = 1"

s5: Right bottom, red-highlighted: "HRG" -> "Lattice QCD"

s10: 3.1-σ -> 3.1 σ (remove hyphen)

s11-S12:
- I would suggest to show the lattice results in s11 and the collision energy 
 
dependence of C5/C1 and C6/C2 in s12 on the same slide.
- I would remove C4/C2 results in s12 to make some space for the lattice  
results.
- Instead, you could show the lattice results (in s5) again in s11.

s14: "Consistent with each other" -> "Smoothly connect each other"

s18: (2023-2025)

s22: Hint of smooth crossover at top RHIC energy

With these considered, I sign off.

Best regards,
Toshihiro

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