STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>]

Dear Fan,

I have suggestions to consider for your nice talk:

General comment: when you present the following results, you could arrange them according to the cross-over measurements, 1-st order phase transition, critical point, and other /future physics motivations (however, it would change the current logic of your presentation completely, leave as you have)

Slide 6: when you mention the 200 GeV dataset, you can consider adding information about Run-10.

Slide 12: when you mention any collision energy, please add \sqrt{s_{NN}} = (first and fourth bullet)

Slides 13, 16, 18, 19, 22: the same comment as at slide 12.

With those implemented I sign off.

Thanks,

Hanna

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Wiadomość napisana przez Fan Si via Star-cf-l <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> w dniu 20.04.2023, o godz. 09:06:

Dear Toshihiro,

Thank you very much for your comments. I have revised my slides accordingly, and the updated draft can be found in the following link.
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/WHBM-2023/Fluctuation-measurements-RHIC-STAR

Best regards,
Fan

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Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Toshihiro Nonaka ( tnonaka AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Fan Si ( sifan98 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/WHBM-2023/Fluctuation-measurements-RHIC-STAR

Comment:
Dear Fan,

Very nice slides. I have only a few minor comments as follows:

s4: It might be informative to write as "Skellam = Poisson - Poisson = C3/C1  
= ... = 1"

s5: Right bottom, red-highlighted: "HRG" -> "Lattice QCD"

s10: 3.1-σ -> 3.1 σ (remove hyphen)

s11-S12:
- I would suggest to show the lattice results in s11 and the collision energy  
dependence of C5/C1 and C6/C2 in s12 on the same slide.
- I would remove C4/C2 results in s12 to make some space for the lattice  
results.
- Instead, you could show the lattice results (in s5) again in s11.

s14: "Consistent with each other" -> "Smoothly connect each other"

s18: (2023-2025)

s22: Hint of smooth crossover at top RHIC energy

With these considered, I sign off.

Best regards,
Toshihiro

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