STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Zachary Sweger <zwsweger AT ucdavis.edu>]

Dear Hanna,

Okay thank you for the suggestion. I've  used a higher-resolution figure and chose an intermediate size. And I was able to get it down to four pages again. The updated proceedings are available here: https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Sweger_MoriondProceedings_v2.pdf

Thank you!

Zach

On Mon, May 8, 2023 at 10:22 AM Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl> wrote:

Hi Zach,

One more comment: you may consider increasing the quality of your phase diagram figure, this allows you to have this figure smaller and to keep your photo at the same time.

Please, try with different formatting / little wording change to say within the limit of 4 pages, and follow the organizers' recommendation.

Thanks,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

PhD DSc Eng, Professor WUT

E-mail: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl

Tel: +48 22 234 5851 (office)

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Wiadomość napisana przez Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl> w dniu 08.05.2023, o godz. 19:16:

Dear Zachary,

I am fine with this. If a photo was suggested by the organizers, then please go ahead and leave it.

Thanks,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

PhD DSc Eng, Professor WUT

E-mail: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl

Tel: +48 22 234 5851 (office)

Address:

Warsaw University of Technology

Faculty of Physics

Nuclear Physics Division

Koszykowa 75

Office: 117b (via 115)

00-662 Warsaw, Poland

Wiadomość napisana przez Zachary Sweger <zwsweger AT ucdavis.edu> w dniu 08.05.2023, o godz. 19:13:

Dear Hanna and Toshihiro,

Thank you for the comments. I believe I've implemented all of them and the new version is uploaded (https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Sweger_MoriondProceedings_v1.pdf)

Two notes:

• LMR, IMR, and HMR are spelled out on lines 55 and 56.
• The conference had requested that each proceedings come with a photo of the author and provided us a template. But they said this was not required, and the new edits brought the page count to over 4, so I had to delete the photo anyway.

Thank you!

Zach

On Mon, May 8, 2023 at 5:54 AM webmaster--- via Star-cf-l <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Hanna Zbroszczyk ( hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl ) has commented on a material 
originally submitted by Zachary Sweger ( zwsweger AT ucdavis.edu ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Rencontres-de-Moriond/Recent-Results-and-Future-Prospects-STAR-Beam-Energy-Scan-Prog-0

Comment:
Dear Zachary,
please find my comments below on your nice proceedings. I am not sure whether 
you should put your photo.  I don't insist on removing it, but please 
reconsider if you really want to have it.
Introduction, 1st page, 4th line from the bottom: mentioning collision 
energies, do not forget to add \sqrt{s_{NN}}.
Figure 1: please increase.
Section 2, add a reference to HBT parametrization: BP (out-side-long).
A peak in R_out/R_side .. is predicted. -> can be predicted.
Section 3: define LMR, IMR (extend abbreviations)
Section 4: second paragraph from 7.7 .. -> from \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 7.7. ..
and later: in 3.0 GeV -> in \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3.0 GeV.

With those and Toshihiro's comments, I sign off.
Thanks,
Hanna


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