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Toshihiro Nonaka ( tnonaka AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Wensong Cao ( wensong814 AT mails.ccnu.edu.cn ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/18th-National-Conference-Nuclear-Physics/Kaonplus-Kaonplus-Correlation-Function-AuAu-C

Comment:

Dear Wensong,

I have some suggestions on your nice slides for your consideration.

Best regards,
Toshihiro

p3:
- Add author name to the reference
- ..., so final state interactions...

p4:
- Add author name to the reference
- "Contains strange quaks": can you add a little bit more why it's  
interesting if the particle contains strange quarks.
- I would move the bottom left sentence and the reference closer to the  
figure (or above the figure), and rephrase "Nonmonotonic energy dependence  
for pion source size: author name, PRC92,014904(2015)",
  just to clarify that this sentence mentions about the figure.

p5: mid-rapidity -> midrapidity

p6:
- p(0.2,2.0)GeV/c -> momentum (0.2,2.0) GeV/c, as p is used for protons

p7:
-Track Splitting and Merging Effects (or please use the same style through  
your presentation)
- Same for later slides
- In figures, please use hyphen instead of tilde to represent the centrality: 
 
0-60%. Also in general  -0.5 < y < 0 rather than y(-0.5,0), and the same for  
pT.
- Same for later slides

p10:
- 1st and 3rd sentence: When -> At
- 2nd sentence: quantum statistics (attractive)

p11:
- It is not clear what "Same" means.

p12:
- I think the 1st sentence fits better to p11 rather than p12.

p14:
- Define Rg and lambda, probably in p13.
- Make legend texts larger

p15:
- 2nd bullet: I would mention about conclusion from the study, e.g.,  
"Correlation function from the data can be reproduced by UrQMD model within  
statistical uncertainties."
- Same for the 3rd bullet.
- Last bullet: Collision energy dependence

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