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Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Hanna Zbroszczyk ( hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Wensong Cao ( wensong814 AT mails.ccnu.edu.cn ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/18th-National-Conference-Nuclear-Physics/Kaonplus-Kaonplus-Correlation-Function-AuAu-C

Comment:
Dear Wensong,
Please find my comments on your nice slides:
Slide 1: Add: Wensong Cao for the STAR Collaboration
please also add: Partially funded by DOE, and add the logo of DOE
Slide 5: add a space: loss(dE/dx) -> loss (dE/dx)
Slide 6: remove && from the bottom
Slide 7: explain in a few words what are merging and splitting effects, and  
add appropriate figures to illustrate the problem;
define \theta and \phi angles and state how big effects they are;
Slide 8: Add more details about the estimation of the finite detectors'  
resolution effect on the measured correlation functions
Slide 9: none of the discussed effects: splitting, merging, and detector's  
resolution is included in the estimation of systematic uncertainties; please  
include all of them to have your calculation complete
Slide: statistics(attractive) -> statistics (attractive) // add a space
Slide 11: function(q_inv) -> function (q_inv) // add a space
General comment: add additional info about data analyzed: year, statistics,  
selection criteria, etc.

Thanks,
Hanna

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