STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

["Keane, Declan" <keane AT kent.edu>]

Hi Yu,

 

STAR Management has asked me to take a look at a few posters, including yours.  You’ve done a great job on this analysis.  Here are a few suggestions:

 

Abstract box: 

I know you’ve already submitted your abstract, but it’s still appropriate to tweak the version that appears on your poster. 

2nd sentence:  --> …3 GeV collisions were reported. The results imply that…  could exist at collision energies…

Next sentence:  “QGP expectation for the hadronic gas” is confusing.  Suggestion: --> QGP expectation at high baryon-chemical potential, which can be a signature for turning-off of the QGP. 

Next sentence:  --> we report…

Last sentence:  --> …are discussed.

 

Intro box:

Your C_{BS} definition should come first, then position your 3 bullets below the equation.

2^nd bullet:  On my screen, $p$ appears twice.  Ref [2] reports net-charge, net-proton, and net-kaon multiplicity.

3^rd bullet:  To make it clear that this bullet is no longer talking about Ref. [2],  --> This work tests the turning-off signal…   

 

Detector box:

--> …Fixed-Target Setup

 

Analysis box:

Analysis details --> Analysis Details

Panel on right:  Consider explaining the notation  C_2.

 

Results box:

Top left panel need “STAR preliminary”.

Readers might be confused by the switch in notation between C_{BS} definitions in intro box and in lower panel here.  Use a consistent notation. 

1^st bullet: -->… all centralities indicates…

Last bullet: --> …supports conclusion that…

 

Summary box:

Last bullet: --> STAR results support…

 

  Best regards,

  Declan

 

From: Star-cf-l <star-cf-l-bounces AT lists.bnl.gov> on behalf of Yu Zhang via Star-cf-l <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
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Date: Thursday, August 24, 2023 at 7:49 AM
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Cc: Yu Zhang <yuz AT ccnu.edu.cn>
Subject: EXT: [Star-cf-l] 回复：Re: STAR presentation by Yu Zhang for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

 

Dear Toshihiro,

 

Thank you very much for your comments.

I've implemented them in the same link.

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/64826

 

Best regards,

Yu

 

 

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star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov<star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> 在 2023年8月24日 周四 16:22 写道：

Dear Yu,

 

I have some comments on your nice poster presentation.

 

With these implemented, I sign off.

 

Best regards,

Toshihiro

 

(Introduction)

- Left figure: y-axis title, \sigma_{SS} -> \sigma^2_S

- 2nd bullet: … measurements with (p,\pi,K^+) and their antiparticles are far…

 

(Analysis details)

- 1st bullet: .. is done for various topological cuts combination

- 3rd bullet: suppress -> remove, [2] -> [3]

- 4th bullet: I would explain here about purity uncorrected results shown in black rectangles

- 2nd right figure: I think this is not needed as you’re not discussing on it.

 

(Results)

- 2nd bullet: The <BS>c and <S^2>c values are consistent with Poisson baselines

 

 

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件名: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Yu Zhang for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Yu Zhang (yuz AT ccnu.edu.cn) has submitted a material for a review, please have 
a look:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/64826

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