STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>]

Hi Dylan,

Please find my comments on your nice slides.

My general comment is that I have the impression you copied some content from Ashish's slides.

I encourage you to substitute these parts with your own (e.g. try to make fonts uniform, etc..).

Slide 1:

I suggest keeping it in one line: Dylan Neff for the STAR Collaboration.

Slide 2:

Can you increase the references for both figures?

Right figure: Please add \sqrt{sNN} when you describe the top-horizontal axis with collision energies. 

Slide 4:

Consider removing + when you mention 0.5 (\eta)

Slide 5:

Here you mention (crossover), before you stated "cross-over" (slide 2). Please make all of them uniform.

Slide 6:

Do you have a better-quality top-right figure?

Please increase the reference to the main figure.

3 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3 GeV

Slide 7:

3 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3 GeV

7.7 GeV and 200 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 7.7 GeV and 200 GeV

Slide 8:

Can you provide any reference to the statement: possible sign of a first order phase transition?

Summary:

39 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 39 GeV

7.7 GeV - 200 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 7.7 GeV - 200 GeV

3 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3 GeV

Thanks,

Hanna

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Wiadomość napisana przez 野中俊宏 via Star-cf-l <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> w dniu 25.08.2023, o godz. 15:57:

Dear Dylan,

Nice slides. I have some comments/suggestions for your consideration.

Best regards,

Toshihiro

General:

- Some texts look like a copy from Ashish’s slides. I would suggest to write down by yourself with the font you mainly use through your slides.

S1:

- Higher-Order Cumulants

S2:

- Crossover

S3:

- I think s3 and s5 should be presented in consecutive slides. I would suggest to put current s4 right after s2.

- I am not sure if lower right 3 sketches help in this presentation, because the focus of the first half of the presentation is C5 and C6. What is the purpose to show the multiplicity distribution in this slide? In this slide, I think it’s important to explain why we present the ratios C5/C1 and C6/C2, instead of cumulants. This is for direct comparison between theory (susceptibility) and experiment, by canceling out the trivial volume dependence of cumulants, which I think can be presented in s3.

S6:

- Hyper-Order Cumulant Ratios

- Are you going to discuss something about C4/C2 in this slide? If not, I suggest to remove the left plot.

- The resolution of top right figure needs to be improved.

S10;

- What is Npq?

S9, S11:

- In these slides you explain how the histograms should look like for no-correlation, lack/excess of clustering, while in S10 you’re talking about variance extracted from the histogram. I understand why you employed this ordering, but it might be easier for the audience to follow if current S9 and S11 are presented in consecutive slides first, then you move to the variance.

S12:

- Please add year for top right papers

S15:

- Can the boundary line of the legend box be removed?

S16:

- I see black dotted lines which are not explained in the legend.

S17:

- 1st bullet: Comparison of hyper-order cumulants with lattice calculations favor crossover….

- 4th bullet: Hadronic interactions are dominant

- 5th bullet: Strong signal of proton repulsion observed

S19:

- Is this a toy model calculation? Can you briefly explain about this model?

S21:

- Move “STAR Preliminary” so it does not overlap with the legend box.

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