STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

["Youquan Qi" <qyq AT mails.ccnu.edu.cn>]

Dear Hanna and Toshihiro,

Thank you very much for your comments. I have implemented it.

Please have a look: https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/64830

Best regards,

Youquan

 

 

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From:  "STAR Correlations andFluctuation"<star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov>;

Date:  Fri, Aug 25, 2023 08:23 PM

To:  "STAR Correlations andFluctuation"<star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov>;

Cc:  "nonaka.toshihiro.ge"<nonaka.toshihiro.ge AT u.tsukuba.ac.jp>;

Subject:  Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Youquan Qi for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

Dear Youquan,

I have a few comments on your nice poster presentation.

With these considered, I sign off.

Best regards,

Toshihiro

(General)

- Please insert a space before the citation number, e.g., “contributions [1]”.

(Introduction)

- “has been shown” -> “have been shown”

(Energy Dependence of Parameters)

- 1st bullet: R_out values are smaller…

- 2nd bullet: less than -> smaller than

(Summary)

- 1st bullet: At the end of the sentence, replace “。” by a period.

- 2nd bullet: … dependencies of the extracted physics parameters on collision energy, centrality, and k_T.

- 3rd bullet: significant differences

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CC: Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>
件名: Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Youquan Qi for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

Hi Youquan,

Please find my comments on your nice poster.

Youquan Qi(qyq@… ) -> Youquan Qi (qyq@..) (please add a space after your name and the bracket)

Remove the comma after your email.

Abstract:

In this poster, we report -> We report

Introduction:

correlation functions -> correlations (or femtoscopic or HBT correlations)

has been shown to be sensitive -> is sensitive

pion-emitting source the duration -> pion-emitting source, the duration

the details of resonance decay -> the resonance decay

contributions[1] -> contributions [1] (put a space)

If QGP transition takes place -> If the transition to QGP takes place

Significantly[2] -> significantly [2] (put a space)

I suggest to rephrase the folowing bullet:

C(\vec{q}) = \frac {N_{same(\vec{q})}} {D_{mixed(\vec{q})}};

veq{q} = \vec{q_1} - \vec{q_2} (or leave as relative momentum)

N_{same}(\vec{q}): pairs from the same event (includes quantum statistics and final state interactions)

D_{mixed}(\vec{q}): pairs from different events

(Remember to put a space between text and a reference)

Bowler-Sinyukov function[4][5] -> Bowler-Sinyukov formula [4,5]

Define \lambda parameter, q_{inv}, K(q_inv), N

STAR Fixed-Target Setup:

\sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3.0 -13.7 GeV -> \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3.0 - 7.7 GeV

750 MeV -> ~720 MeV (you can illustrate with the QCD phase diagram)

Correlation Functions:

Please define k_T

Energy Dependence of Parameters:

I would remove the statement about statistical and systematic uncertainties added in quadrature.

Can you add the possible interpretation that source sizes for negative and positive pions are different?

Try to make the bullets shorter. I suggest to mention basic statements about long sentences.

Summary:

Try to please make the bullets shorter (the same content by expressed with shorter statements).

With those implemented, I sign off.

Enjoy the conference!

Thanks,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

PhD DSc Eng, Professor WUT

E-mail: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl

Tel: +48 22 234 5851 (office)

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