STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[野中俊宏 <nonaka.toshihiro.ge AT u.tsukuba.ac.jp>]

Dear Rutik,

Please find my comments/suggestions below for your poster presentation.

Best regards,

Toshihiro

(Title) Mean pT fluctuations…

(Abstract)

- Incident energy -> collision energy

(Motivation)

- dense matter created in

(Uncertainty estimation and Efficiency correction)

- 2nd bullet: .. calculated by using bootstrap method.

- Remove histogram titles from the figures

- Why are you showing pT dependent efficiency averaged over particle species? In my understanding, you use pT dependent efficiency for each particle specie, then determine the response matrix for <pT> of charged particles. If so, I would draw 3 curves for pi/K/p efficiencies without averaging.

- Upper figure

— remove legend, just instead add “0-5% centrality” inside the panel.

— Add y-axis title

- Lower figure

— Make font size larger for axis label/title and texts inside the panel.

- (iii) The pT dependent efficiency is applied based on the binomial response to implement the detector effects.

(Efficiency correction and Mixed Events Analysis)

- Suggest to change the title to “Mean pT Distributions and Mixed Events Analysis”

- Change “Efficiency Correction” above the left figure to “Mean pT Distributions”

- “Seems to not…” : This should be discussed based on numbers. Add a corresponding table.

- Add one bullet to explain the procedures for the mixed events (explain the bottom right sketch).

(Results - I)

- Remove “Acceptance specific” and “Collision energy dependence”. Instead, I would suggest to list the eta acceptance above left two figures.

- 1st bullet: This should be discussed based on numbers. Add a corresponding table, or add numbers inside the figure.

- You are comparing the mean and sigma between left two panels and right figures. This is difficult to understand by eyes based on the log-scale plots. I would replace right 4 figures by a table.

- Right panels are taken from [2]?

(References/)

- Remove “/”

- Add page numbers for all references.

(Summary/Outlook)

- 2nd bullet: Elaborate more. Correlations of what? You want to measure pT correlations just because they are robust to detector effects? If you have other motivation to measure pT correlations, I suggest to mention  that, because you’ve already performed efficiency correction in your <pT> fluctuation analysis.

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Dear Rutik,

Please find my comments on your nice poster.

Motivation:

Can you add a reference to your figure with QCD phase diagram?

I don’t see reference [3] mentioned anywhere.

Uncertainty estimation an efficiency correction:

Please make sure you define all quantities from the mentioned equation.

Results -II

Finish Thermal FIST part as soon as possible. 

All figures: please make consistent your all labels „STAR preliminary”. Choose if you put a text or graphic.

Thanks,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

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