STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

["Keane, Declan" <keane AT kent.edu>]

Hi Yu,

 

The latest version of your poster (v2) is very nice.  A few further suggestions:

 

Abstract box:

--> A correlation function contains information about the dynamics in the early stage of collisions.  This allows the study of the geometry and dynamic properties of the particle emission region, which is important for deep understanding of the evolution of quark gluon plasma formed in heavy-ion collisions.  In this poster, we present measurements of the proton correlation function in Au + Au collisions at \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3.2 GeV from the second phase of the beam energy scan (BES II) at STAR. The rapidity and centrality dependence of the correlation function are shown.

 

[Also, the font size for the abstract doesn’t need to be bigger than everything else.  You can make it smaller and use extra space for diagrams & figures.  Some figs in the previous version were way too small, but now it’s acceptable.]

 

Femtoscopy box:

1st bullet --> In heavy-ion collisions, a two-particle correlation function can probe the space-time geometry of the particle emission source. This technique is called femtoscopy.

 

Correlation function box:

[You don’t need to define both P(p_1) and P(p_2) separately.]

Last definition: --> wave function of the pair

 

Track splitting box:

pairs production --> productions of pairs

closely momentum --> close momentum

[Use capital K* to be consistent with notation elsewhere on your poster]

 

Track merging box:

[Use capital K* to be consistent with notation elsewhere on your poster]

 

Results and summary box:

[CF notation on vertical axes should be consistent with definitions in corr fn box.]

[All legends for sys error don’t agree with the actual way of plotting (except for color).]

2^nd bullet:  have been done --> are presented

 

References box:

Use the same style for [2] as for the other references.

 

   Best regards,

   Declan

 

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Subject: EXT: Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Yu Zeng for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

Dear Hanna and Toshihiro,

Thanks very much for you comments. I have implemented them and reupload my poster.

Please have a look: https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Yu_Zeng_QM2023_poster_v2_.pdf

Cheers,

Yu Zeng

 

 

 

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Date:  Sat, Aug 26, 2023 09:44 PM

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Subject:  Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Yu Zeng for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

Dear Yu,

 

I have a few minor suggestions on your nice poster presentation.

 

- Section title “Correlation Function” -> “Correlation function”, “Results and Summary” -> “Results and summary”

 

- Make axis labels/titles and legends bigger.

 

- (Summary) The centrality and rapidity dependence…

 

With these implemented, I sign off.

 

Best regards,

Toshihiro

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件名: Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Yu Zeng for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

 

Dear Yu,

 

Please find below my comments on your nice poster.

 

Add a space between your name and email and the comma after your email.

 

Abstract: I suggest not mentioning QGP as at 3.2 GeV, we don’t expect it.

Will be shown -> are shown

 

Femtoscopy section: Two-particle -> two-particle

function(referred -> function (referred

spacetime -> space-time

and Twiss interferometry -> and Twiss interferometry [1] (add a reference)

 

I suggest here to mention not only the fact that in astronomy, the properties of stars are determined but also that we deal with different orders of size magnitudes (HIC: fm, astronomy: tens of m), and that in astronomy, the signal intensities are measured, while in HIC the momenta of emitted particles (to extend little bit what is seen on the figure).

Please add the reference to the figure.

 

Correlation Function:

Define N, P(p-1, p_2), P(p_1), P(p_2), S(r)

 

Track-splitting effect:

two(Track1 and Track2) -> two (track 1, track 2)

 

Track-merge effect:

tracks(Track1 and Track2) -> tracks (track 1 and track 2)

 

Results and Summary,

Please increase the font sizes at your figures (axis, scales)

Source size is extracted -> Extract the source size

You can mention f_0 and d_0 parameters when you write the effective range and the scattering length.

You can add [3] reference here.

 

Add a place where you mention [2] reference.

 

With those implemented, I sign off.

 

Enjoy the conference,

 

Thanks,

Hanna

 

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

PhD DSc Eng, Professor WUT

 

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