STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Nu Xu <nxu AT lbl.gov>]

Hi Paweł and All,

I went through the draft and below are my comments/suggestions for this 
manuscript. I also made comments on the pdf file which is stored in the 
Google drive:
https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XT4vOHskzYn7n0KQgL77Cs82BYTmW2wv/view?usp=drive_link__;!!P4SdNyxKAPE!H3JNpwzpgz86kZgN2hJg1RCsndPb7GhobDDwr_d-D5D_AWyt2P86ldpOPPfr-WNtZQ-rJopJh1zjAYO_TQ4$
 

Please update the paper and we should have another round of discussions 
within the PWG before request GPC. 

Best regards,

Nu

1)    Fig.8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 15, 16, 17,18, 19, 20, 21, 22 x-axis label is too 
close to the x-axis numbers. Move away for about 2mm;

2)    Fig. 13 and 14: Needs x-axis label “Collision Centrality”;

3)    Fig. 24 and 25 need x-axis label “k*  [GeV/c]”;

4)    Page 1 – Abstract: (i) 4th sentence: I am not sure that I understand 
the sentence ‘Source sizes exhibit consistency across different sign 
combinations,’ What do we mean ‘consistency’ here? How about “Source size 
results of like-sign, both positive and negative pairs and unlike sign pairs 
are consistently show a similar collision energy and centrality dependence”?; 
(ii) Last sentence: I suggest change to something like: “The sizes of pi-K 
sources increase with increasing centrality and collision energy implying 
strong collective expansion in such collisions.” Now the question is: Is this 
statement only apply to pi-K pairs? Why not K-p or pi-p?

5)    Line 441: I suggest change the session title to something like “Results 
of Correlation and Discussions”;  

6)    Page 11 – Fig. 21 and 22: Need legends for different pairs in the 
figure. A bit confusion now;

7)    Page 13 – line 577: Not clear which variables were checked for pi-K, 
pi-p and K-p pairs;

8)    Page 13 – line 583: remove the sentence;

9)    Page 13 – line 594: No data was shown to support the statement;

10) Page 13 – line 598: Unclear what does it mean;

11)  Page 13 – line 608: add at end: “… for source R and asymmetry parameters 
of the pi-K pairs”


> On Mar 24, 2024, at 9:13 AM, Paweł Szymański via Star-cf-l 
> <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> 
> Dear Conveners and All,
> Our paper, "Non-identical particle femtoscopy measurements in the STAR Beam 
> Energy Scan program", is ready for PWG review. 
> 
> PAs: Diana Pawłowska-Szymańska, Sebastian Siejka, Paweł Szymański, Daniel 
> Wielanek, Hanna Zbroszczyk
> 
> Paper website: Drupal paper proposal
> Paper draft: paper_draft.pdf
> Analysis note: analysis_note.pdf
> The analysis code is attached to the paper website.
> 
> We look forward to your comments and suggestions regarding the analysis and 
> publication.
> 
> Best regards,
> Paweł (on behalf of PAs)
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