STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[ChunJian Zhang <chun-jian.zhang AT stonybrook.edu>]

Dear Prithwish,

Thank you for the helpful comments. With including all the suggestions, please find the new version at https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/DNP-2022/Measurement-nuclear-deformation-high-energy-isobaric-96Ru96Ru-and-96Zr96Zr--0 

Please find the comments included and addressed as follows: 

Side#3:
Define "0\nu\beta\beta" somewhere on this slide.
"Rarely experimental measurements" --> "Few experimental measurements" or "Rarely explored in experiment”

Changed 

Slide#4: "based on N_{ch}^{offline} with" --> "based on uncorrected tracks (N_{ch}^{offline}) in”

Changed 

Slide#6: Some texts are overlapping, the page number is hidden.

Changed 

Miner & optional comment: the references are not written in conventional  formats (like Zhang and Jia, PRL 128, 022301 (2022)).

Changed 

"cancelation" --> "cancellation"

Changed 

It is not clear what you mean by "cancellation expected in non-central collisions". What gets cancelled with what? Also, this is approximately true, right ? Then maybe say "approximate cancellation”

Added “approximate". The effect from Beta_3 canceled the v2 ratios. 

The 4th bullet is a bit confusing, right? What do you mean by this? It depends on how the size is defined. Larger neutron skin means large size, so there's an apparent contradiction between the 3rd and the 4th bullets.

 added "R0"

Slide#7:
"non-linear" --> "Nonlinear" in title and everywhere

Changed 

"reflect nuclear structure" --> "reflects difference in nuclear structure”

Changed 

It's impossible to see what you're plotting on the two right figures. At least write in bigger fonts that you're plotting "Mean ratio" and "Third moment ratio”

Add large labels 

Slide#8: "Study nuclear structure" --> "Study of nuclear structure"
"increase in central" --> "increase in central collisions"

Changed  

It is very difficult to read what is plotted on the

Add large labels 

Slide#9: Add "More investigation using STAR data is underway”

Added 

It is not clear what your conclusion is from the data-model comparison on the right. Can you please add a short sentence.

Add one more sentence. 

Slide#10: "identical for Ru and Zr in final state as expected" --> "consistent between Ru+Ru and Zr+Zr as expected"
While talking do mention that "as is it driven by final state effects”

Changed and will follow your nice suggestions. 

"variance and skewness" --> You didn't show skewness, maybe say "variance and third order moment”

We showed the skewness  in the right lower plot on slide 8th

Add "more studies underway" in the last bullet.

Added 

Best regards

Chunjian 

On Oct 23, 2022, at 6:43 PM, Prithwish Tribedy via Star-fcv-l <star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear ChunJian,
 Very nice slides. Here are my comments. With these included, I sign off.

General comment: some of the fonts you have used are too small.

Side#3:
Define "0\nu\beta\beta" somewhere on this slide.
"Rarely experimental measurements" --> "Few experimental measurements" or "Rarely explored in experiment"

Slide#4: "based on N_{ch}^{offline} with" --> "based on uncorrected tracks (N_{ch}^{offline}) in"

Slide#6: Some texts are overlapping, the page number is hidden.

Minor & optional comment: the references are not written in conventional  formats (like Zhang and Jia, PRL 128, 022301 (2022)).

"cancelation" --> "cancellation"

It is not clear what you mean by "cancellation expected in non-central collisions". What gets cancelled with what? Also, this is approximately true, right ? Then maybe say "approximate cancellation"

The 4th bullet is a bit confusing, right? What do you mean by this? It depends on how the size is defined. Larger neutron skin means large size, so there's an apparent contradiction between the 3rd and the 4th bullets.

Slide#7:
"non-linear" --> "Nonlinear" in title and everywhere
"reflect nuclear structure" --> "reflects difference in nuclear structure"
It's impossible to see what you're plotting on the two right figures. At least write in bigger fonts that you're plotting "Mean ratio" and "Third moment ratio"


Slide#8: "Study nuclear structure" --> "Study of nuclear structure"
"increase in central" --> "increase in central collisions"

It is very difficult to read what is plotted on the

Slide#9: Add "More investigation using STAR data is underway"

It is not clear what your conclusion is from the data-model comparison on the right. Can you please add a short sentence.


Slide#10: "identical for Ru and Zr in final state as expected" --> "consistent between Ru+Ru and Zr+Zr as expected"
While talking do mention that "as is it driven by final state effects"

"variance and skewness" --> You didn't show skewness, maybe say "variance and third order moment"

Add "more studies underway" in the last bullet.

Best,
Pritwish








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