STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Takafumi Niida <niida AT bnl.gov>]

Dear Niseem,

I’m asked by STAR management to have a look at a few posters including yours. 
Please find my comments to your nice poster for your consideration.

Abstract:
- its weak -> their weak
- "constraints on the theoretical calculations' initial conditions and medium 
properties” I would remove “theoretical calculations’ “.

Motivation:
- Gives -> Give
-  the heavy ion collisions’ initial state -> the initial state in heavy-ion 
collisions

Analysis method
- “… four Event plane…” -> “… four event plane…”
- The table can be omitted and replaced with one sentence like “Two subevents 
for two, three, four particle cumulants and full-event for higher orders”. It 
would be more useful if you write definitions of SC(n,m) and NSC(n,m) 
explicitly here or “Flow harmonics correlations” section.
- “Summary of the methods used in these measurements” Not sure if this is 
needed.

Event plane angular correlations
- “Comparison of the three-, four-, five- and six-event plan”: The last part 
should be "six-order event plane”. 
As you also show psi1-psi2 correlation, probably better to say “Comparison of 
nth-order event plane angular correlations vs centrality”.
- Can you define \rho_{n1,n2} and \rho_{n1,n2,n3}?
- “The rho_{2,4} and rho_{2,3} show similar values…” rho_{2,3} is almost zero…
- “Except for rho_{2,6}…” Looks interesting. Do you have any naive 
explanation?
- “…less than the initial state’s” -> “…less than that from the initial state”
- For the legend of the left 6-panel plot, consider to add extra line (space) 
between “AMPT Au+Au 200 GeV” and “Au+Au 200 GeV” or perhaps to change “Au+Au 
200 GeV” to “Data Au+Au 200 GeV”, so that it’s easier to see what are data 
and what is model.
- "expected to reduce the GMC effect” Do you mean “less affected by GMC”? 
Also spell out GMC when it appears for the first time.

Flow harmonics correlations
- "… six-particles...” -> “… six-particle…”
- “vs. Centrality” -> “vs. centrality”
- Can you say something about the energy dependence since you show many data 
in NSC?

Conclusion
- show -> shows (in two places)
- (Anti) -> (anti)

Best regards,
Takafumi
 


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