STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

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Fuqiang Wang ( fqwang AT purdue.edu ) has commented on a material originally  
submitted by Zhengxi Yan ( zhengxi1yan AT gmail.com ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Quark-Matter-2023/Measurements-harmonic-flow-and-their-fluctuations-16O16O-collision-0

Comment:
Zhengxi,

I was asked to review a few posters including yours. Please find my comments  
below.

1. motivation
the first bullet is weak. It can be said to a lot of nuclei. I'd delete it.  
Or you may say OO is somewhere between dAu and CuCu. Nevertheless, I'd start  
with the second bullet, and then say that.

second bullet: through -> thorough

I'd delete "to pin down QGP formation" because you start off saying we want  
to understand collectivity, so I won't change abruptly to QGP.

"System size dependence of evolution parameters in heavy-ion collision."  
seems weak and is already covered by the other bullets. I'd simply delete it.


2. detector
Try to keep the bullet texts on a single line each.

3. Methods
suppress -> suppresses
Is TPCa with |eta|<0.5? Right now you wrote |eta|<1.

4. Results
STAR preliminary on all and each plot

Below "2-particle flow w/ non-flow subtraction from TPC-TPC or TPC-EPD", add  
"nonflow subtraction by the c1 method"
Would be good to have some details on nonflow subtraction in the method  
section.

Add a bullet on the OO and HeAu, dAu comparisons

5. Summary
"2-partilce correlations are similar in wide rapidity range measured." ->  
seems to me that you want to conclude on v2,v3, not 2-particle correlations  
which are vague here.

Maybe change "uncover physical implecations such as the role of different  
stages in driving the
collectivity in small system collisions." -> "investigate the role of  
different evolution stages in developing collectivity in small system  
collisions."?


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