STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Takafumi Niida <niida AT bnl.gov>]

Dear Chunjian,

Thanks for addressing my comments. I have one more minor comment (if you haven’t printed the poster).

Just above “Conclusions”, multipole observables -> multiple observables

Enjoy the conference!

Best regards,

Takafumi

On Aug 26, 2023, at 11:51, Chunjian Zhang <czhang.phys AT gmail.com> wrote:

Dear Takafumi,

Thank you for your insightful comments and suggestions. Please find the revised version attached in https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Quark-Matter-2023/Imaging-shape-atomic-nuclei-high-energy-nuclei-collisions-STAR 

Please find the detailed reply for easy tracking: 

“for the STAR Collaboration”: Only “Collaboration” looks italic.
fixed it. 
Observables
- Only “Kurtosis” starts with capital letter while “mean” and others don’t. Nice to be consistent in style.
- Please consider to make these formula a bit larger as you have some space in the right.
fixed it. I also add more references in the related part. 

Results in U+U and Au+Au
- Enhancement of v_{2,U}/v_{2,Au} is due to combined effects of the larger…
How about mid-central? If you mean only very central, consider to add “in most central collisions” before “is due to” above.
Use a more specific way to convey the clear physical messages. 
Results in Ru+Ru and Zr+Zr
- “<v2>^{1/2} — ratio”, “<v3>^{1/2} — ratio”: Is this true? Do you mean {v2^2}^{1/2}? At least the legend says “v2,Ru / v2,Zr”.
Sorry for the typo. I fixed and removed it, but used a light black legend. 
Conclusions
- assistant -> assists

 fixed it.
- many-nucleon -> many-body nucleon?

fixed it. 
- It seems that suddenly the words "gluon saturation and nPDF” appear and it wasn’t clear how these measurements are useful to understand them. It would be helpful if you can add a brief explanation or reference(s).
 I added a reference. 
Bottom-left: change to “Supported in part by"

Used the "Supported in part by". 

Thank you,

Chunjian 

On Fri, Aug 25, 2023 at 12:11 PM Takafumi Niida via Star-fcv-l <star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear Chunjian,

I’m asked by STAR management to have a look at a few posters including yours. Please find my comments to your nice poster for your consideration.

“for the STAR Collaboration”: Only “Collaboration” looks italic.

Observables
- Only “Kurtosis” starts with capital letter while “mean” and others don’t. Nice to be consistent in style.
- Please consider to make these formula a bit larger as you have some space in the right.

Results in U+U and Au+Au
- Enhancement of v_{2,U}/v_{2,Au} is due to combined effects of the larger…
How about mid-central? If you mean only very central, consider to add “in most central collisions” before “is due to” above.

Results in Ru+Ru and Zr+Zr
- “<v2>^{1/2} — ratio”, “<v3>^{1/2} — ratio”: Is this true? Do you mean {v2^2}^{1/2}? At least the legend says “v2,Ru / v2,Zr”.

Conclusions
- assistant -> assists
- many-nucleon -> many-body nucleon?
- It seems that suddenly the words "gluon saturation and nPDF” appear and it wasn’t clear how these measurements are useful to understand them. It would be helpful if you can add a brief explanation or reference(s).

Bottom-left: change to “Supported in part by"

Best regards,
Takafumi

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