STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Andrew,

Thank you for your plan to perform this new measurement in STAR.
Please find my comment and suggestions on your abstract.

1. Title- "Correlators in pp Collisions at √s = 200GeV from STAR"
I think title needs more information to convey about "N-particle energy 
correlator in jet".
Something like "Measurement of energy correlators within jet in p+p 
collisions at √s = 200GeV in STAR"
Or "Measurement of 2-particle energy correlators within jet in p+p 
collisions at √s = 200GeV in STAR"
2. Andrew Tamis -> Andrew Tamis (for the STAR collaboration)
3. "Within high energy collisions, Jets are a unique…"
-> "Jet is a unique…hard-scattered quarks and gluons in high energy 
collision experiment."
  4."…in Jet-finding…" -> "… in jet-finding.."
  5."..allow for increased study…" -> "…allow for detailed study…"
6."…the quark/gluon shower, fragmentation, and
the resulting final hadrons." -> "the quark/gluon shower, fragmentation, 
and the hadronization in the Quantum-Chromodynamics."
7. "…within jets defines an observable that probes…" -> need to 
introduce here what is that observable ? For example, "…within jets 
defines an observable, the N-particle energy correlator in jet, that 
probes…" ; the introduction of this observable may need reference so 
please provide reference of previous study.
8. "N-point" ->  "N-particle" would be clearer.
9. "re-contextualize" -> "recontextualize"
10. "By plotting the 2-point energy correlator as a function of opening 
angle, one can determine the crossover region from where the scaling 
behavior of the correlator changes from scaling as a random distribution 
of hadrons at low opening angles, to scaling as quarks and gluons 
dominated by perturbative interactions at large opening angles." -> 
Please break this statement and paraphrase it. Not sure what is this 
"scaling"?
11. Second para, I would prefer to start with "In this talk, the study 
of 2-point energy correlator in jet will be discussed using PYTHIA and 
STAR grant simulation using kinematic coverage of the STAR experiment." 
(Or Something similar to this) So that we will not be saying explicitly 
to show the results from p+p data at this moment in the abstract. But at 
the end this abstract, you could mention STAR plan to perform this 
analysis where you could show some preliminary plots in your talk if you 
could have by that time. [I think this what we discussed at our last 
meeting]. Please let me know what do you think.
12. "The correlation functions were approximated.." -> "The correlation 
functions are approximate…"
13. "…y-φ space…" -> "… rapidity-azimuthal angle phase space…"
14. "…approximated via multiplicity histograms of the opening angle…" -> 
 "…approximated by the distribution of the opening angle…
15. "simulations in PYTHIA" -> "simulation using PYTHIA"
16. "selections on overall" -> "selections on the overall"
17. "pT" -> "transverse momentum ($ p_{\rm T}$)"


Regards,
Nihar




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