STAR HardProbes PWG

[Andrew Tamis <andrew.tamis AT yale.edu>]

Hello Nihar,

Thank you very much for the feedback!

1. Done

2. Done

3. Done

4. Done

5. Done

6. Done

7. Done, and attached reference

8. I use N-point as it is what the attached reference i used called them, I think it may be better to maintain cohesion

9. Done

10. By Scaling behavior, I mean the expected shape of the curve in that region due to theory predictions.  It is the language used in my reference, should I do more to introduce it here?  Perhaps I can just change it to curve shape.

11. By the time of the talk, I may not have unfolding ready at a level that I am willing to show, but I still believe it is helpful to mention that I will show data, and the sentence mentioning "first studies" may be vague enough to not overrepresent what I will be bringing.  I believe that showing that the detector level data exhibits the same behavior to constituent pt cuts as the PYTHIA simulations contains useful information.

12. Done

13. Done

14. Done

15. Done

16. Done

17. Done

I have made these changes and several others that were suggested.  The updated abstract is here https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/DNP-2022/Correlators-pp-Collisions-Sqrts200GeV-STAR

Thank you,

Andrew Tamis

On Fri, Jun 17, 2022 at 6:14 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Andrew,

Thank you for your plan to perform this new measurement in STAR.
Please find my comment and suggestions on your abstract.

1. Title- "Correlators in pp Collisions at √s = 200GeV from STAR"
I think title needs more information to convey about "N-particle energy
correlator in jet".
Something like "Measurement of energy correlators within jet in p+p
collisions at √s = 200GeV in STAR"
Or "Measurement of 2-particle energy correlators within jet in p+p
collisions at √s = 200GeV in STAR"
2. Andrew Tamis -> Andrew Tamis (for the STAR collaboration)
3. "Within high energy collisions, Jets are a unique…"
-> "Jet is a unique…hard-scattered quarks and gluons in high energy
collision experiment."
   4."…in Jet-finding…" -> "… in jet-finding.."
   5."..allow for increased study…" -> "…allow for detailed study…"
6."…the quark/gluon shower, fragmentation, and
the resulting final hadrons." -> "the quark/gluon shower, fragmentation,
and the hadronization in the Quantum-Chromodynamics."
7. "…within jets defines an observable that probes…" -> need to
introduce here what is that observable ? For example, "…within jets
defines an observable, the N-particle energy correlator in jet, that
probes…" ; the introduction of this observable may need reference so
please provide reference of previous study.
8. "N-point" ->  "N-particle" would be clearer.
9. "re-contextualize" -> "recontextualize"
10. "By plotting the 2-point energy correlator as a function of opening
angle, one can determine the crossover region from where the scaling
behavior of the correlator changes from scaling as a random distribution
of hadrons at low opening angles, to scaling as quarks and gluons
dominated by perturbative interactions at large opening angles." ->
Please break this statement and paraphrase it. Not sure what is this
"scaling"?
11. Second para, I would prefer to start with "In this talk, the study
of 2-point energy correlator in jet will be discussed using PYTHIA and
STAR grant simulation using kinematic coverage of the STAR experiment."
(Or Something similar to this) So that we will not be saying explicitly
to show the results from p+p data at this moment in the abstract. But at
the end this abstract, you could mention STAR plan to perform this
analysis where you could show some preliminary plots in your talk if you
could have by that time. [I think this what we discussed at our last
meeting]. Please let me know what do you think.
12. "The correlation functions were approximated.." -> "The correlation
functions are approximate…"
13. "…y-φ space…" -> "… rapidity-azimuthal angle phase space…"
14. "…approximated via multiplicity histograms of the opening angle…" ->
  "…approximated by the distribution of the opening angle…
15. "simulations in PYTHIA" -> "simulation using PYTHIA"
16. "selections on overall" -> "selections on the overall"
17. "pT" -> "transverse momentum ($ p_{\rm T}$)"


Regards,
Nihar




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