STAR HardProbes PWG

[Diptanil Roy <roydiptanil AT gmail.com>]

Hi Nihar, thank you for your comments. I have uploaded a new version (v2) with the new version attached. https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/QMProceeding_Diptanil_v2.pdf

in Eq.2 and L79:  "r" -> make it italic (because  r has some value) and
elsewhere

L118:  bring "in the left panel of Figure 3" at the end of the sentence;
  (r) -> ($r$)

I am keeping it 'r' because the preliminary plots have 'r', and I have used it for nothing previously.

Please let me know if you have any comments/suggestions.

On Mon, Jul 11, 2022 at 6:37 AM Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Diptanil,

My comment and suggestion can be found below on your nice proceedings.

Title: add "in STAR"

General:
1_ Don't use any italic font through out this proceedings
2_ Fig-1, you mention D-mesons you reconstruct between pT: 5-10 GeV/c;
but though out the paper you use pT > 5 GeV/c, which one you have used
for the calculation of radial profile and D tagged jet pT?  Is there any
counts above pT > 10 GeV/c.


L8: "…reconstruction …" -> "… the reconstruction …"
L18-19:"The partons which give rise to these jets lose energy to the QGP
medium, either through collisions, or through induced gluon
bremsstrahlung - a phenomenon known as jet quenching [2]" -> "The
hard-scattered partons lose energy, either through collisions or through
medium-induced gluon bremsstrahlung, while traversing through the QGP
medium "em dash" a phenomenon …"  [no "hyphen"; see usage of "hyphen"
and "em-dash"]
L16: "…are useful in studying …" -> "   …are used to study…"
L17: "One such probe, called jets, manifests …" -> "Jet, one of such
probes, manifests …"
L21-22: "…in measurements of energy-loss .." -> we do not measure
"energy-loss" in heavy-ion collisions; RAA, IAA, etc are the way to
assess that. Please rephrase this statement. ;  "jet-structure " -> "jet
structure "
L24: "…of the aforementioned parton energy loss …" -> "…of the parton
energy loss…" [no needed as you are referring in the same sentence]
L25: "An important prediction of QCD, the dead-cone effect was measured"
- > "The dead-cone effect, as predicted by the QCD, was observed…" 
[here dead-cone is the object in the sentence; "QCD prediction" is extra
info…];
"…at LHC[], but remains…" -> "… at the LHC[], but this remains… " [LHC
-> the LHC all places]

"*Presented at Quark Matter 2022…" -> you could bring that to the
"Acknowledgment" at the end.
L27-29: "Heavy flavor jets at LHC… the parton masses. Therefore…" I
think this sentence is not needed to mention why it is important at LHC
and (in the next stentence "the complementary RHIC.." it seems
downgrading RHIC measurement. Please rephrase this or remove the LHC
sentence.

  L32: "jet pT spectra" -> "jet transverse momentum (pT) spectra"
L33: "…in D^0 (Dbar^0) meson tagged jet from Au+Au…" -> "…in its tagged
jets in Au+Au …"

L36: "          ‘Minimum Bias’(MB) " -> no italic and without quotation marks;
L37: "          at nucleon-nucleon center of mass energy of  sqrt(s_NN)=200 GeV,
collected" -> "… at sqrt(s_NN)=200 GeV collected…" [ not needed as you
mention sqrt(s_NN)=200 GeV; that is enough]

L40: "          the STAR pseudorapidity " -> "the pseudorapidity "
L51: "E_T > 0.2 GeV" mention what is E_T? " are defined using "-> "are
reconstructed using…"
L52 "FASTJET" -> FastJet"
L58: "…D^0() candidate as a constituent. " -> "… D^0() as one of the
constituents."
L68: "…finite vertex resolution, based on…" -> "…finite vertex
resolution based on…"
L73: elpsilon_corr -> can you please elaborate? How do you calculate
from all the above contributions ?  Need some info here.

Eq.1 : Can you give some space between N_evt, pT, dPt, etc?

In Eq.2 and L79:  "r" -> make it italic (because  r has some value) and
elsewhere

L93:  "  … ‘single-particle’ … "  ->    " ..single-particle…" ;
         " embedding single-particle jets in MB Au+Au events" Can you
please correct me if you have embed (single-particle carrying whole
energy) a jet or multiple jets in MB events? From your statement you
embedded multiple jets in an event.
L94: Mention your jet matching criteria
L98: Njet -> "$N_{\rm jet}$
L102: "b) systematics from …" -> Need to mention what you have used from
this ref[9], for example, systematic procedures, method, or directly you
use percentages of uncertainty to calculate systematic uncertainty
L104: "…are estimated…" -> "…are determined…"
L108-109: "…is shown in the left panel of Figure 2, as a function of …
Au+Au collisions." ->" …is shown as a function of … Au+Au collisions in
in the left panel of Figure 2."
L111: "         The nuclear modification factor, R_CP…" -> Define R_CP in this
sentence.

Fig.2: In the caption or in the text, you need to mention about blue and
green uncertainties bands due to N_coll.

L113-115; This whole sentence you can shorten by saying " The D^0 tagged
jet R_cp shows a strong suppression in central collisions than in
mid-central collisions at low pT,jet."
L116: "…bins, which …" -> "…bins which …"

Fig-3: Caption: use period at the end.

L118:  bring "in the left panel of Figure 3" at the end of the sentence;
  (r) -> ($r$)
L125: "In this proceedings, the first…" - "The first…"
L128: "…collisions, with the …" -> "…collisions with…"
L130: "         , which is qualitatively  different from inclusive jets. " Make
a new sentence. "This trend is qualitatively different from the
inclusive jet measurements at RHIC.
L130: "The radial profiles …" -> "The radial profile of D^0 meson in its
tagged jets …"   ; "bins, within…" -> "…bins within…"


Cheers
Nihar


On 2022-07-06 20:05, Diptanil Roy via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hi everyone, please find the first draft of the Quark Matter 2022
> proceedings above. Please let me know your comments on the same. The
> last date for submitting the proceedings is August 1, 2022.
>
> Thank you.
>
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