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[Barbara Trzeciak <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com>]

Hi Tong,

nice abstract. 

Please see my comments below. With these addressed I sign off.

L3: carry transport properties -> provide information about transport properties

L3: One common proxy to these partons is the -> A common proxy to these partons are

L4-5: , where its quenching effects can be reflected via -> (I would suggest a new sentence here). Quenching of high pT particles can be quantified via the 

L11: differential measurement on -> differential measurements of

L12: momentum particles -> pT particles

L12: and its -> and their

L12-13:  collisions will provide ->  collisions provide

L13: you don't need ( ⟨Npart⟩ ), as you don't use it later.

L14-15: "properties of hard scattering productions" - this is not clear to me. Could you please rephrase. 

L15: with system size -> with the system size

L15: Combining with previous measurements, we -> Combining the isobar results with the previous measurements, we will

L17:  to RAA in peripheral Isobar ->  on RAA in peripheral isobar

Cheers,

Barbara

On Wed, Jul 20, 2022 at 9:01 PM Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Tong,

Thanks a lot for the explanation. They are fine to me.

Cheers,

Yi

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On Thu, Jul 21, 2022 at 1:48 AM Tong Liu via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Yi and Nihar,

Thanks for the comments. I have two response on Yi's comments:

1. L4: hadronize --> hadronized : I think we should use present tense in this sentence, because the process of partons hadronization is a reproducible objective fact, and shouldn't depend on when you perform the experiment. 

2. dependence of --> dependence on: Here I mean "high pt hadron raa's dependence on system size"; I put "high pt hadron raa" behind "dependence" because it's too long, especially as I was using "medium modification" earlier, and hence the "of". Now that it looks shorter though, I can put the phrase to the front, if you think it reads better.

I totally agree with your other comments, and I have uploaded the latest version onto drupal. Let me know if you have any additional comments.

Tong Liu

Ph.D. Student '2023 

Physics Dept., Yale University

Tel: 203-435-2130

On Tue, Jul 19, 2022 at 11:17 PM Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Tong,

Thanks a lot for the nice abstract. I have some minor comments for your consideration. 

 - Title: there are two "collisions", so it reads a bit "redundant". Is it a way to simplify the title? For example "Investigation of system size dependence on high pT hadron yield modification in isobraic nucleus-nucleus collisions at sqrt(sNN) = 200 GeV at STAR" ?  It is completely up to you. 

 - L4: hadronize --> hadronized 

 - L7: dependents --> dependence on

 - L9: I would move "at sqrt(sNN) = 200 GeV" right after (Ru+Ru & Zr+Zr)

 - L10: you have an extra space before "2". 

 - L11: its nuclear modification factor --> its RAA

 - L15: dependence of --> dependence on

 - L16: medium modification of --> the RAA of

 

Cheers,

Yi

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Department of Physics
National Cheng Kung University
Tainan, 701 Taiwan
E-Mail: yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw
Tel: +886-6-2757575 ext.65237
Fax: +886-6-2747995
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On Tue, Jul 19, 2022 at 1:35 PM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Tong,

Please find my comments on your nice abstract.
With this I sign off.

Line1:  traveling -> traversing
Line2: created -> produced
Lin#6:  on energy  -> on the energy
Line7:  its dependents the size -> its dependents on the size
Line8: & -> and
Line16: report observation -> report the observation

Cheers
Nihar



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