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[Sooraj Radhakrishnan <skradhakrishnan AT lbl.gov>]

Hi Derek,

   Thanks for preparing these nice proceedings. Please find a few comments from me below

L34: 'photons scattered from energetic photons': what do you mean here? do you want to say scattering of initial hard partons

L53: Previously, (also STAR had?)

L58: STAR previously also has

L74: done in previous measurements 

L99: pedestal

L108: pT^reco,ch is not defined

L108: Why a different symbol for Deltaphi here?

L109: why say in the measured Delta phi distributions here? The pT axis also has correction, and the pT projected measurements also, doesnt?

L113: Any uncertainties or expectations on if this factorization is expected to hold? It would be good to state

L121: shifted and smeared to match those in the data?

L122: dont have to repeat trigger-smeared here

L135: the line is needlessly broken here

L138: It would be better to place the figures near the discussion. You have Fig.1 on page 2, but its discussed only on P5

L166: p_T,jet^ch is also not defined

L175: why spell out trigger smeared here and not in the IAA discussion?

L189: You need to have a summary for the proceedings 

thanks

Sooraj

On Wed, Jul 27, 2022 at 11:43 PM Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Derek,

I have some comments on v1.0 for your consideration. 

  - General: the overall layout is very strange. Figure 1 is on page 2, but it is mentioned on page 5. Figure 2 is in the introduction part, but it is mentioned in the Results and Discussion. I understand you have lots to show, so I don't have any good solution for you. Probably remove one or two plots? 

  - L33: with with --> with 

  - Figure 1: Please explain the colors in the plots, dark red (blue) and light red (blue) are... 

  - L34: I am a bit confused with this sentence "photons scattered from energetic photons", do you mean "photons scattered from energetic partons"? I probably miss something here. 

  - Figure 2 Caption: PYTHIA-8 (MONASH tune) --> PYTHIA-8 with MONASH tune

  - L51: [7] should be [5]  (just the number...)

  - L56: [5] should be [6]

  - L60: [6] should be [7]  

  - L64: at STAR --> at STAR in p+p and Au+Au collisions. 

  - L67: should mention the collision energies for both p+p and Au+Au collisions here. Which year for p+p data? 

  - L71: probably you don't need "(BEMC)" since you didn't use it later. 

  - L86: Do you have any idea how "small" it should be? Any reference? 

  - L93: In Au+Au --> In Au+Au collisions 

  - L99: pedestat --> pedestal

  - L103:  Au+Au --> Au+Au collisions 

  - L116: PYTHIA-8 (MONASH tune) --> PYTHIA-8 with MONASH tune

  - L126: "the details of the un folding procedure (e.g. the choice of  regularization and prior), and the uncertainty on B." I don't understand this sentence. What is "B"? 

  - Figure 3 Caption: PYTHIA-8 (MONASH tune) --> PYTHIA-8 with MONASH tune

  - L135: It is empty after "Au+Au" 

  - L157: in figure 2 --> in Fig. 2 

  - L158:  PYTHIA-8 (MONASH tune) --> PYTHIA-8 with MONASH tune

  - L163 and Figure 1: the green line is the pi^0 and gamma_dir +jet combined in p+p? If so, just for my own education, why don't you separate them in p+p as in Au+Au? 

  - L171: In figure 3 --> In Fig. 3 

  - L175: PYTHIA-8 (MONASH tune) --> PYTHIA-8 with MONASH tune

  - L179: figure 4 --> Fig. 4 

  - L182: figure 4 --> Fig. 4 

  * If you don't have enough space, I would suggest only showing one R value in Fig. 3 and Fig 4, say only showing R = 0.5 plots for p+p and Au+Au. 

  - References: the journals should the standard abbreviation, like PRC --> Phys. Rev. C

Cheers,

Yi

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On Wed, Jul 27, 2022 at 10:59 PM Derek Anderson via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi all,

I wanted to give a heads-up on these: I'm currently working on some comments I received offline and will upload a new version of the proceedings later today. The main changes will be a substantial reduction and streamlining of the text so that the figures can be made to be much larger.

 -- Derek

On Sun, Jul 24, 2022 at 9:20 PM Derek Anderson <derekwigwam9 AT tamu.edu> wrote:

Hi all,

I've implemented some comments received offline, and now the proceedings are an even 6 pages. The new version of the proceedings can be found in the link below!

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/AndersonDerek_ProceedingsQM22.v1_0.pdf

 -- Derek

On Thu, Jul 21, 2022 at 10:50 AM Derek Anderson <derekwigwam9 AT tamu.edu> wrote:

Hi all,

Apologies for the extreme tardiness on this, but please find in the previous message the 1st draft of my QM2022 proceedings. Currently, they're sitting at 7 pages (parallel talks are limited to 6), so I'll be working on cutting things down... However, the general structure and details are there, so please let me know if you have any comments, suggestions, or questions!

 -- Derek

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Sooraj Radhakrishnan

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Department of Physics

Kent State University

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Nuclear Science Division
Lawrence Berkeley National Lab
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Email: skradhakrishnan AT lbl.gov