STAR HardProbes PWG

[zli1 <zli1 AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Sooraj and Yi,

Thanks for your useful comments, I upload a new version v2 on drupal.

Based on Sooraj's comments, in addition to the modified text,
I rewrite sec 2
I adjust the order of figures and corresponding discussions in sec 3.2, 
now they follow pT,pT^2, and mass distribution.

Based on Yi's comments, in addition to the modified text,
I think dielectron is better, thank you! And I changed dimuon to mu+ 
mu-, except in the title and dimuon trigger.
 - L31: In this proceeding   Sorry, I didn't catch your meaning.
L76, since I adjust the order, so the references are still in the same 
position.

Best,
Ziyang
On 2022-11-16 11:23, Yi Yang wrote:
> Hi Ziyang,
>
> Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I have some minor comments for
> your consideration.
>   - General: the order of you references are strange, it starts with
> [11, 12] in L16
>                    dielectron or di-electron, you have to pick one and
> make it consistent over the whole article (many places).
>                    change dimuon to mu+ mu- ?
>   - L10: implication is --> implications are
>   - L31: In this proceeding
>   - L33: pT and pT^2 --> pT, and pT^2
>   - L40: [10], (2) --> [10]; (2)
>   - L42: add a space in front of [9]
>   - L43: I would suggest to rewrite this sentence to something like
> (Just for your consideration....): "The combinatorial background is
> estimated using the unlike-sign distribution from mixed-events.
> However, in the low mass regions, since the correlated backgrounds are
> not negligible and can not be reproduced by the mixed-event method,
> the dimuon like-sign distributio  from the same-events is used to
> remove the backgrounds."
>   - Eq(1): add a comma in the end,
>   - L56: Where --> where
>   - L76: Put references for EPA-QED and STARlight here, you can remove
> the ones in L80.
>
> Cheers,
> Yi
>
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> On Fri, Nov 11, 2022 at 8:41 PM zli1 via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Nihar,
> >
> > Thanks for your nice comments, I upload a new version. Please have a
> >
> > look.
> > By the way, I can only edit the file in this link:
> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61422
> >
> > This proceeding is limited in 6 pages, now it is over the limit a
> > bit. I
> > think I could reduce the words after other comments.
> >
> > L13：add "such as the Chiral Magnetic Effect (CME), anisotropic
> > charmonium production, spin-charge correlation for final-state
> > hadrons,
> > and so on."
> > L14：rephrased: "However, there is a lack of experimental
> > measurements of
> > the proprieties of the EM fields."
> > L27: add "In total, an integrated luminosity of 14.2 $\rm nb^{-1}$
> > was
> > sampled by the dimuon trigger." (and the integrated luminosity of MB
> >
> > trigger used in dimuon analysis is 0.2 nb^{-1}, I'm not sure if it
> > is
> > also needed to list here)
> > L33: rephrased: "The low mass di-muon (0.4<$\rm M_{\mu\mu$<0.64
> > GeV/$c^{2}$) and the J/$\psi$ (2.9<$\rm M_{\mu\mu$<3.2 GeV/$c^{2}$)
> > production are analysed separately."
> >
> > Best,
> > Ziyang
> >
> > On 2022-11-09 19:59, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > Hello Ziyang,
> > >
> > > Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.
> > >
> > > GeV/c -> GeV/$c$ (all places)
> > > p+p -> $p+p$
> > >
> > > Abstract Line 10: "In this contribution, we present recent …" ->
> > "We
> > > present the recent…"
> > > "...and its physical implications…" -> "... , and its
> > implication is
> > > discussed."
> > >
> > > L12: "…fields can be induced …" -> "  …fields are
> > induced…"
> > > L12: "In heavy-ion collisions, … the relativistic heavy ions "
> > -> "In
> > > the relativistic heavy-ion collisions, … the heavy ions "
> > > L13:"…                various interesting phenomena …" -> "…
> > various interesting
> > > phenomena, like " Mention what are those "interesting phenomena"?
> > > L14: ", while there is a lack of clear experimental measurements
> > of
> > > the strength and spatial of the EM fields." -> Not clear. Please
> > > rephrase it and make a separate sentence.
> > > L15-16: "…, leading to photon-induced  interactions []" ->
> > remove
> > > comma.
> > > L17: "significant enhancements of…" -> "a significant
> > enhancement of
> > > dilepton pairs and the J/shi…"
> > > L23:"The measurements of very low 𝑝T vector meson and dilepton
> > > production in peripheral heavy-ion collisions …" -> "The
> > measurements
> > > of the vector meson and dilepton production at very low pT in
> > > peripheral events…"
> > > L24: "to study photoproduction in collisions" -> "to study the
> > > photoproduction in heavy-ion collisions"
> > > L25: "                and smaller impact parameters " -> "…and
> > relatively smaller
> > > impact parameters.."
> > > "It also provide …" -> "It also provides information of the
> > strength
> > > and the spatial distribution of the EM fields produced in these
> > > collisions."
> > > L27: " In 2014, the STAR experiment recorded large samples of
> > Au+Au
> > > collisions at √𝑠NN =200GeV. " -> "The STAR experiment
> > recorded the
> > > large sample of datasets in Au+Au collisions at √𝑠NN =200GeV
> > in 2014.
> > > " Please provide lumi. of your dataset to support your "large
> > sample
> > > data"
> > > L28: "In this contribution, we will present new measurements …"
> > ->"In
> > > this proceeding, we present the new measurements of the dilepton
> > and
> > > the J/shi production at very low pT in peripheral collisions…"
> > > L30:"…𝑝T and 𝑝2T will be shown. " -> "              𝑝T,
> > and 𝑝2T are shown."
> > > L30-31:"      Physical  implications will also be discussed
> > together with
> > > model comparisons. " -> "Different models are compared to the data
> > and
> > > their implications are finally discussed."
> > >
> > >
> > > L33: "This contribution…" -> what contribution? In the previous
> > > sentence, you have already discussed about dataset and 2014.
> > Please
> > > rephrase this.
> > > L35:"For J/𝜓, " -> "for the J/𝜓 measurement,…"
> > > L37: "… (MTD)[9]. (2) For…" -> "… (MTD)[9], (2) for…."
> > (There should
> > > be "comma" after 1st bullet)
> > > L38:"…        minimub-bias trigger events …" -> "
> > minimub-bias events "
> > > L39:"Time of flight" -> "Time-of-Flight"
> > > L40:"…candidates from the same event are paired …"
> > ->"…candidates,
> > > from the same event, are paired …"
> > > L41:"mass spectra, the combinatorial background is …" ->
> > "…mass
> > > spectra. The combinatorial background is…"
> > > L42 and 43: "mixed-events" -> "the mixed-events";  "from
> > same-events"
> > > ->"from the same-events"
> > > L45: "obtained, while the J/shi…" -> "obtained. The J/shi…"
> > > "the maximum likelihood method." ->Give reference
> > >
> > > L49: "Data points are fitted by Tsallis function … -> "The data
> > points
> > > are fitted by the Tsallis function …"
> > > "… significant enhancement …" -> (Make another sentence)
> > > "Significant…."
> > > L50-51: "To quantify the J/shi production modification in hadronic
> > > A+A…" -> "To quantify the relative suppression of J/shi
> > production in
> > > Au+Au …"
> > > L52: "… , Which is defined as …" -> (Make a new sentence) "It
> > is
> > > defined as,"
> > > Eq1: Define what are enumerator, denominator, N_coll?
> > > L53-54: "A large enhancement of 𝑅𝐴𝐴 above unity …" ->
> > "A large
> > > enhancement of the J/shi yield in peripheral collisions relative
> > to
> > > the $p+p$ collisions is observed. It strongly suggests the excess
> > > J/shi yield is due to the photon-induced production in peripheral
> > > collisions."
> > > L59: "…shows J/𝜓 yields …" -> "…shows the J/𝜓 yields
> > …"
> > > N_{part} -> $N_{\rm part}$
> > >
> > > L70: "EPA-QED calculations …" -> "The EPA-QED calculations …"
> > > L71: "….that 𝑝T …" -> "… that the pT…"
> > > L72." …impact parameter dependence and should be considered. "
> > ->
> > > "…    impact parameter dependence." (Rest not needed)
> > >
> > > L75: "for comparison. EPA-QED…" -> "…for the comparison. The
> > EPA-QED…"
> > > L76: "STARlight …" ->"The STARlight…" ; "data" -> "the data"
> > > L82:" In this contribution, measurements …" -> "The measurements
> > …"
> > > L85:"The results are compatible with the theoretical calculations
> > with
> > > EPA, show the enhancements …" -> "The data are comparable with
> > the EPA
> > > calculations indicating the enhancements … "
> > >
> > >
> > > Cheers
> > > Nihar
> > >
> > > On 2022-10-23 20:46, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > > >
> > > > Ziyang Li (lzy9404 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn) has submitted a material for
> > a
> > > > review,
> > > > please have a look:
> > > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61423
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