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[Barbara Trzeciak <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com>]

Hi Yi, Nihar,

thank you for your comments, I uploaded a new version.

Cheers,

Barbara

On Mon, Mar 13, 2023 at 6:40 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Barbara,

Thank you for preparing this nice and concise HF abstract for IS2023.
Please find my comments below.
With these implemented, I sign off.

L5: "…screening mechanism, which causes …" - > "…screening mechanism
which causes …"
L8: "…the initial  medium temperature. " -> Or it is "the initial
temperature of the medium". There is a subtle difference.
L9: "They are also interesting on their own as they help… " -> Please
avoid colloquial text.
  "Quarkonium studies in p+p and p+A collisions serve as the necessary
baseline for heavy-ion collisions. They also helps to understand the
quarkonium production mechanism and the cold nuclear matter effects in
p+p and p+A collisions, respectively."
Here ",respectively." we use in _a sentence_ to indicate a sequence of
information, but not from another sentence.

L14: "quarkonium production process. " -> "the quarkonium production
process."
"charged particle …" -> "the charged particle"

L17: "J/ψ and Υ state measurements" -> " the J/ψ and Υ state
measurements"
"measurements, including " -> " measurements including "

Cheers
Nihar



On 2023-03-13 08:11, Yi Yang via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hi Barbara,
>
> Thanks a lot for preparing this nice abstract.
> I only have some minor comments for your consideration:
>   - L20: 200, 500 GeV --> 200 and 500 GeV
>   - L20 - L22: this sentence reads a bit complicated. I would suggest
> just simply saying ""Nuclear modification factor and elliptic flow of
> J/psi and Upsilon in various collision systems (Au+Au, p+Au, Zr+Zr,
> and Ru+Ru) will be presented.
>   - L23: measurement --> measurements
>
> Cheers,
> Yi
>
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