STAR HardProbes PWG

[Andrew Tamis <andrew.tamis AT yale.edu>]

Hello Barbara,

Thank you very much for the nice comments.  I have implemented all of them and uploaded my new version, here are some notes on some of the changes

-s6 Added a note that I calculate average Jet pT from PYTHIA spectra

-s10 For the second part being more technical, i have now moved my GEANT statistical uncertainty explanation to a previous slide where I can talk about it in more detail, and changed some of the wording

On Slide 16 I have included a comparison with the previous CMS result, showing that the <pT jet>*Rturnover produces something in the same order of magnitude, showing that this result is consistent.  I believe this is significant, with how quickly the log axis moves and the ambiguity in declaring the start of the turnover region (If I say the previous bin on my plot is the start of the transition region I get 2.7GeV), please let me know how you think I should present this point.

Let me know if you have any other suggestions.

Best,

Andrew

On Wed, Mar 15, 2023 at 8:49 AM Barbara Trzeciak via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Andrew,

please find below my comments to your nice slides.

- s2: clustered -> Clustered (to be consistent with other bullet points)

- s3: add full reference to the right plot (same s4)

- s5,6: please improve the quality of the number values in the Jet pT legend

- s5: "Curve normalized to integrate to" - you can make the font of this bullet point a bit smaller, as it's a note

- s6: the arrows are displaced to the right from the dashed lines

- s6: when you calculate the turnover point, how do you get the average jet pT for each range ? Do you use the PYTHIA spectra ?

- s6: you have twice "Average" in the equation, <p_T^Jet> shall be enough. 

- s6: higher Jet transverse -> higher jet transverse

- s7: I would suggest putting here a scheme of the STAR, with the most important detectors marked. 

- s7: I would remove this "triggers on and", you mention trigger at the end of the sentence. 

- s8: Add on the plots information about simulations, system, energy. There's a line on the right side of the left plot.

- s8: right plot - add y-axis title, increase size of data points and use different markers. 

- s8: for Jet Pt -> x for Jet p_T

- s10: y-axis - add [%], improve quality of the legend, make the lines wider and different styles, and I would decrease the y-axis max so that all the contributions are visible.  Add the "STAR preliminary" label. I would suggest also using the same description of the sys. unc. in the legend as you have on the previous slide. 

- s10: I would suggest making bullet points to be consistent with the style of other slides, and unify the font. Also, the second part of the text on this slide sounds too technical, could you please improve it and make a short point(s). 

- s11: make the data point markers and font larger (e.g. you can move the "STAR Preliminary" label up to have more space of the text). The two plots look displayed relatively to each other. Same for other result plots. 

- s11: "Distribution moves " - this might not be clear. Maybe: average of the distribution moves to lower angles ... 

- s12: I would remove "Doing some estimations ...", remind instead of the equation you show earlier 

- s13, 14: make the style of the plots consistent with the previous plots, increase the font size, etc. Also, you can merge from down the lower ratio plots with the upper plots. 

- s15: add a conclusion bullet

- s16: Mark here again to which region each colored band corresponds to - as on slide 12. 

- s16: Increase the font size of "Increasing R increases ... "

- s17: Increase the legend font size, and you don't need "Corrected Data:"

- s17: Make the conclusion sentence standing out more, and remind what is the Effect - transition region moves to smaller opening angles with increasing jet pT

- s17:  Higher Jet Radius ->  higher jet radius

- Please consistently make all the slides' titles bold (or not bold)

Cheers,

Barbara

On Tue, Mar 14, 2023 at 2:34 AM webmaster--- via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

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