STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Ziyang,

Thank you for your nice poster.
Please find my comments below.


Title: "\sqrt S_{\rm NN}" -> Mąkę small "s"

Introduction:
"…Weizsacker-Williams equivalent photon approximation (EPA)" Please 
provide a reference.

This red colored texts may be not required in 3rd and 4th bullets.

"at very low pT" -> it would be good if you can give threshold like 
energy of quasi-real photon etc.
You did not introduce what is ultra-peripheral collisions? People may 
not know UPC in heavy-ion collisions better to say a few words.

5th bullet is saying same as 4th bullet except the "STAR observation".
"Evidence of photon interactions in hadronic heavy ion collisions." This 
can be sub-bullet of 4th with "Evidence of photon interactions in 
hadronic heavy ion collisions seen at the STAR experiment.
And Remove 5th bullet.


Section.II
"Muon PID at STAR" -> "Muon indentification at STAR"

"Measure energy loss, dE/dx cut." -> "Particle identification using 
dE/dX"
"Trigger on and identify muons." -> "Identification and triggering on 
muon"

Section.IV

"Excesses concentrate below pT" -> "Excess dimuon yield concentrates at 
below pT.."

"Indication of the 4th-order azimuthal angular modulation of μ+μ- 
pairs." And
"The hint of 2nd-order azimuthal angular modulation."

I think you want to say that the data indicate both the 2nd and 4th 
order angular modulations.
Is it?


Cheers
Nihar


On 2023-04-13 21:25, zli1 via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hi Barbara,
>
> Thanks for your nice comments, I upload a new version.
>
> Best,
> Ziyang
> On 2023-04-13 15:52, Barbara Trzeciak wrote:
> > Hi Ziyang,
> >
> > very nice poster. Please see below my comments.
> >
> > - General: improve the quality of the plots. I would also suggest
> > increasing the font size.
> >
> > Introduction:
> > - "Evidence of photon interactions ... " - use the same font size as
> > for the rest of the text.
> > - Dimuon channel measurements provide additional statistics -> Dimuon
> > channel measurements complement the previous results from dielectron
> > channel
> >
> > - Add reference to the plots. Move the text that is below to the
> > figures to the top.
> >
> > Muon PID at STAR:
> > - "Au+Au ..." text on the 1/beta figure is not well visible, either
> > move it or use a different color.
> >
> > J/psi measurements:
> > - "The invariant yield (left) ... " and "The p_T^2 distribution of
> > J/psi yield (left) ... " - you can move this text to the figures'
> > captions, in this way you will have more space to increase the font
> > size in other places.
> > - consistent with EPA calculation. [4] -> consistent with EPA
> > calculations [4].
> >
> > μ+μ- continuum measurements:
> >
> > - "The μ+μ- excess yields as a function of invariant mass (right)"
> > and "The p_T^2 distribution of excess yield (left) ... "- same as
> > before, you can move this text to the figures' captions, in this way
> > you will have more space to increase the font size in other places.
> > - as a function of invariant mass (right) ->  as a function of
> > invariant mass (left)
> > - in peripheral collisions. -> in peripheral collisions (right).
> > - delta phi distribution(right) -> delta phi distribution (right), in
> > peripheral collisions
> > - It would be good to define delta phi
> >
> > Summary:
> > - The data are comparable with the EPA calculations indicating -> The
> > EPA calculations can describe the data indicating
> > - Provide the experimental confirmation of the EPA predictions and can
> > be used to map -> Can be used to map
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Barbara
> >
> > On Thu, Apr 13, 2023 at 3:03 AM zli1 via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > > Hello Nihar,
> > >
> > > Sorry for the mistake, and thank you for the help.
> > > But I haven't found your comments in this link, did I miss
> > > something?
> > >
> > > Best,
> > > Ziyang
> > >
> > > On 2023-04-12 18:21, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > > Hello Ziyang,
> > > >
> > > > I can see two entries for this poster, hence I rejected the
> > > following
> > > > one.
> > > > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/63332
> > > >
> > > > You will get my comments on the following entry.
> > > > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/63331
> > > >
> > > > Cheers
> > > > Nihar
> > > >
> > > > On 2023-04-12 14:11, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > > > >
> > > > > Ziyang Li (lzy9404 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn) has submitted a material for
> > > a
> > > > > review,
> > > > > please have a look:
> > > > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/63332
> > > > >
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