STAR HardProbes PWG

[Barbara Trzeciak <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com>]

Hi Tanmay,

please find below my comments to your nice abstract.

- L2: to vacuum -> to a vacuum case

- L2: , courtesy of the ambient -> due to the presence

- L3: plasma medium -> plasma (QGP) medium

- L3: radial distribution -> radial distributions

- L4: of constituent properties in heavy-ion jets -> of heavy-ion jet constituents (?, this sentence is not clear)

- L6: in fragmentation -> in the fragmentation

- L9:  QGP medium from -> the  QGP medium in

- L9: Calculations -> Measurements

- L12: observe harder -> show harder

- L12: of medium -> of the medium

- L13: from heavy-ion -> in heavy-ion

- L14: further characterize jet-medium -> to further characterize the jet-medium

- L18: estimated -> assessed

- L20: soft-radiation -> soft radiation

- L20: has been probed -> is probed

- L20: by comparing with calculations using groomed jets -> by comparing to groomed jets results

- L21: Monte Carlo models -> Monte Carlo predictions

Cheers,

Barbara

On Sun, Apr 23, 2023 at 1:06 AM Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Tanmay,

Thanks a lot for the nice abstract, I have one minor comment on (v3) for your consideration: 

 - L17: from Au+Au collisions --> in Au+Au collisions 

Cheers,

Yi

On Sat, Apr 22, 2023 at 11:54 PM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Tanmay.

Please find my additional comments.
with these implemented I sign off.

Title does not sound good.
Please use the following
>> Measurement of jet modifications of momentum profile and generalized
>> angularities in Au+Au collisions at √sNN = 200 GeV at STAR

L13:"... will inform our understanding of..." please rephrase it.

Cheers
Nihar







On 2023-04-21 22:10, Tanmay Pani wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> Thank you for the comments, I have implemented them and updated
> version is here: Tanmay_Pani_QM23_v2.pdf [1]
>
> Regarding the groomed-jet stuff, sorry that I forgot to add it in my
> discussion yesterday, I added it at the last moment as an extra
> measurement that I would like to do once I have my finalized jets from
> AuAu, as I already have macros for grooming in my framework. I can
> talk more about it after a few internal discussions in next, or
> next-to-next week's meeting.
>
> Thanks,
>
> Tanmay
>
> On Fri, Apr 21, 2023 at 6:31 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
>> Hello Tanmay,
>>
>> Please find my comments on your nice abstract.
>>
>> Title : How about?
>> Measurement of jet modifications of momentum profile and generalized
>>
>> angularities in Au+Au collisions at √sNN = 200 GeV at STAR
>> L1-4: You can concise it. for QM conf, everyone knows jet-quenching
>> and
>> QGP.
>> L4-6:   this sentence needs work. Can you please try again?
>> L11: in presence of medium …in LHC -> in presence of the medium
>> … at the
>> LHC.
>> L11-15: thess sentences need some work.
>> L16-17: "       we present the first, fully corrected for
>> detector-smearing,
>> measurements of …" -> "…we present the first measurment of fully
>>
>> corrected       ρ(r), g, pDT and LeSub observables …"
>> L19-20: using a p + p collision baseline.  -> relative to p+p
>> collisions
>> baseline.
>> L20-21: "The effect of soft-radiation has been probed by comparing
>> with
>> calculations  using SoftDrop groomed jets. " is that true? We have
>> not
>> discussed this in your QM2023 status presentation yesterday. Have I
>> missed here?
>> L21-22:         "The observations have been compared with
>> state-of-art  Monte
>> Carlo simulations and calculations. " -> "Finally, the data are
>> compared
>> with the Monte Carlo models and the implications are discussed. "
>>
>> Cheers
>> Nihar
>>
>> On 2023-04-19 19:23, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
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>>>
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