STAR HardProbes PWG

[David Stewart <0ds.johnny AT gmail.com>]

Hi Nihar,

Thanks for your careful reading and feedback. I have updated my slides to version 1 in the system at this page (which points to this pdf). Please see my comments and edits responding to your comments in-line below,

Best regards,

Dave

On Fri, Jun 9, 2023 at 2:26 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Dave,

Please find my comments on your nice presentation slides.


SLide-3:
_ '&' -> 'and' all places

done 

_"Experimentally observe initial parton distribution: " -> Sounds
awkward, if you refer to Slide 7and 8, then I would prefer "Measure
quark and gluon fraction initiated jet"

edited

_Measure parton shower increasingly differentially  -> Not clear what do
you want to say?

edited 

SLide-4:
_Experimental data: particles in STAR -> "STAR detector" [as you have
not discussed any data and run except detector]

? not sure why, but done 

_TPC particles  -> Charged particles from TPC
_TPC + BEMC particles -> Charged particle from TPC and neutral particles
from BEMC

Not changed for now; I think this is more words without any extra meaning because the type of particles are already stated in TPC and BEMC bullets above.

SLide-5:
_Field theory predicts observable -> Give reference. arXiv:2205.03414 ,
2209.11236
_"Observe/measure Λ_QCD" -> Do you mean we can measure
"Λ_QCD" using EEC? Make it clear.
_ @ -> "At" or "For"

done 

SLide-6:
_ Title: First corrected EEC measurement -> I recall these are not  

"corrected". Can you please confirm it?

done 

_ GeV/c vs GeV/ italic{c} -> make it consistent at all places

done 

SLide-8:
_Can you please remind me where do you get this preliminary plot?

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/blog/gmcnam/Preliminary-Request-Jet-Charge-DNP-2022 

_(data is moving to the right -> more quark dominated) ->it is not
apparent. Can you point to me this preliminary results or previous
presentation slides?

same link as above -- but you can see it i

Slide-9:
_ I like right side jet cartoon. But it is quite unusual to have that
many particles in pp jet even if it is a cartoon. Can you please make
that with less number of arrows.

I'll put it on my list to remake a new more pp-like 

_ Make the equation size bigger so that visible to audience

done 

_hot nuclear effects -> hot-dense QCD matter effect

 done

_"Same results from measurement of jet girth" -> Better to be silent as
you are not showing any results here. Opt to drop it.

I have the figure in the backup, it was just cut for time. Is there a graceful way to advertise that this is also being measured?

Slide-13:
jets from -> jet yield from

done 

SLide-14 and 13:
Introduce "EA"

done on slide 13 

Slide15
_ RAA -> R_AA

done 

_ At RHIC kinematics -> Or "At STAR kinematics"

 done

_ (3) jet in BBC ->  Do you mean "activity in BBC"? Not sure what is
"jet in BBC"?

done 

_ No "auto-correlation" from jets in EA acceptance -> Can you please
explain what do you mean here "auto-correlation"?

edited 

Slide-16:
_ mid-pT and lower-pT ->  mid-p_{T}^{reco} and lower-p_{T}^{reco} _"
Anti-correlation: EA distribution in high-𝑝T jet events significantly
softer than EA distribution in mid-𝑝T and lower-𝑝T jet events" -> here
this sentence is confusing. It is because of  "high-𝑝T jet events"  and
"mid-𝑝T and lower-𝑝T jet events"; Can you please clarify it?

 revised

_And what is this <BBCE sum > for each pT^reco bins? Not clear.

label is edited 

_In side plot, 10< p_{Tiled}^{reco} < 15 -> 10< p_{Tiled}^{reco} < 15
GeV/c; same for other two

done 

SLide-17:
_"Qualitatively different from quenching in QGP in A+A collisions" ->
Can you please expound what is the qualitative difference here between
A+A and p+A?

really good catch -- I have reorganized the bullets to indicate the logic 

Slide-20:
_ "Correlation results not from final state effects, but rather “new”
physics present in initial configuration of the ions, or the initial
stages of the collision" -> Not clear where do you get this conclusion?
Can you please point to me which results you refer here?

 wording is edited

I suggest to improve your summary slides 20-21. In the current form, it
is a bit unorganized way summarizing your beautiful results and number
of topics you covered in this presentation. Can you please give a try to
improve it so that audience can get takeaway message ?

 are much edited

Cheers
Nihar


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