STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Gabe,

Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.

Gabe

Title:Baryon to Meson  -> Baryon-to-Meson

Abstract:
_ …from 200 GeV Au+Au and p+p collisions.. -> … in Au+Au and p+p 
collisions at sqrt{s_{\rm NN}} = 200 GeV …

Fig.1, Can you please adjust the position of Fig.1 inside your latex 
file so that it should not appear before the Introduction?

L9: Heavy ion -> Heavy-ion [and other places]
L11-14: Please try to combine these sentences. Besides, "modification of 
charged particle spectra" and "jet quenching" are the same phenomenon. 
You could also include "melting of quarkonia"

For example: "Key signatures of QGP are jet quenching, melting of 
quarkonia, and enhancement of baryon-to-meson ratio production, etc."

L14: "Modification of charged particle spectra is measured a … -> Not 
required in this context. Please drop it.

L15: "The observed differences in all of these observables …" ->  In 
this sentence it is not clear to me "that cannot simply be modeled as a 
large collection of binary collisions" Can you please elaborate what do 
you mean here? Or rephrase.

L18: …enhancement in relative baryon production … -> 		… relative 
enhancement in baryon production [ but not clear "relative to what?"]

L19: Jets are columnated collections of hard scattered particle 
production that are present in … -> Jets are collimated sprays of 
hadrons produced from hard scatterings of partons in both p+p…

L21: probes for the study of QGP -> probes to study the QGP…

L22:	Jet quenching has been observed in this fashion, serving … -> Not 
required at this point. Please drop this sentence.

L24:	features of QGP; baryon enhancement a … -> features of QGP: baryon 
enhancement a

L25: …aiming to further develop understanding of how jets fragment in … 
-> This part is not required. Either you make another sentence or remove 
it.
L26:	Recent AMPT simulations lead us to expect an … -> 		Recent AMPT 
simulations predicts an enhancement of baryon-to-meson ration inside jet 
in heavy-ion collisions [].

L28-29: 	…ratios from Au+Au and p+p collisions at at √𝑠𝑁 𝑁 = 200 GeV. -> 
…ratios in Au+Au and p+p collisions at sqrt{s_{\rm NN}} = 200 GeV.

L32:    Time of Flight  ->   Time-of-Flight

L33: Jet clustering is performed according to the anti-𝑘T algorithm -> 
Jets are reconstructed using anti-kT algorithm,

L34: 	constituent 𝑝T, 𝑝T𝑐𝑜𝑛𝑠𝑡 , minima [6]. -> constituent transverse 
momentum, 𝑝T𝑐𝑜𝑛𝑠𝑡 [6].

p_{T}^const -> $p_{\rm T}^{\rm const}$ [all places]
p_{T}^{raw} ->p_{\rm T}^{\rm raw}
Please follow the guidelines for symbols: 
https://iupac.org/wp-content/uploads/2016/01/ICTNS-On-the-use-of-italic-and-roman-fonts-for-symbols-in-scientific-text.pdf

Apply for eta_jet and phi_jet, etc.

L35: 10 GeV/c -> 10 GeV/\it{c} [other places]

L39:	resulting distribution to 1 at maximum -> 	resulting distribution 
to unity at maximum

L40:	dividing it out of the raw correlation signal. -> Not clear . 
Please rephrase it.
L43:	equal area away from the peak in 𝑑𝜂 to is -> equal area away from 
the peak in 𝑑𝜂 is
L45: hadrochemistry sitting beneath the signal,  -> Please elaborate. It 
is not clear.
L46: in relative azimuth ->  in azimuth.

L46: 		Histograms are constructed in each .. -> Not clear what 
"Histograms"? Better to mention the observables or quantity that you 
fill the histo.
"UE distributions are subtracted from jet distributions. " ->  is that 
correct "from jet distributions" ?

L50: what is "PID variables. " ?

L51: To achieve PID two … -> For particle identification, the two 
different ….
…for the low and high -> at the low and high p_{\rm T} as shown in 
Fig.3. ["respectively" not needed]
L52: "…ToF resolution is very good, so proton yields.. " -> if ToF 
resolution is good, then why proton yield can be directly bin-counted. 
Mention the reason.
L53: what are "nSigma_pi" and "dE/dx"? Mention it in the text.

L63: 	in all jets from p+p collisions. -> for all jets in p+p 
collisions.
What is "  inclusive ratio "? Please explain/mention it before.

L64: …as ALICE has observed similar  -> as the ALICE experiment has 
observed the similar behavior in … at the LHC [].

L66: "Broader jet selections tend to have a higher fraction of gluon 
jets " -> Not sure, how do you conclude ?
L69: "A higher 𝑝𝑐𝑜𝑛𝑠𝑡 minimum corresponds …" -> rephrase this. Not 
clear.

L78: so it is perhaps unsurprising that the in jet 𝑝/𝜋 ratio is 
un-modified. -> the p/pi ratio of jet could be unmodifed. [no need to 
mention "perhaps unsurprising"; better to write what we observed]
However,  "These are the jets that are expected to have the least 
interaction with the medium, …" is not a correct statement. How do we 
know?

L80-81: introduces further background handling considerations. -> 
introduces additional background in heavy-ion collisions.

L82: "Given the stability of the in-jet ratios from " -> Not clear what 
"stability"? Please elaborate and write down.


L85: the first ever -> the first

L87: p/pi ratio is stable,  -> Not a correct way. Please mention what is 
"stable" meaning?
L90: "             the inclusive band " -> that of inclusive p/pi ratio.

Fig.2: Caption
"The center plot shows and overlay in 𝑑𝜙 of the two regions." -> The 
center plot shows the 𝑑𝜙 distributions of the two regions.

Fig.4: "A published inclusive band is included for comparison agains the 
bulk 𝑝/𝜋 ratio behavior" -> "The band represents the  p/pi ratio 
measured from the inclusive proton and pion measurements []. "
"Inclusive bands" -> "inclusive p/pi ratio"


Cheers
Nihar

























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