STAR HardProbes PWG

[Tristan Protzman <tlp220 AT lehigh.edu>]

Hi Yi,

Thanks for the comments.  I've replied to your comments below and will upload a new version with your and Nihar's comments shortly.

Cheers,

Tristan 

- General: it would be good to specifically mention this is the v2 for "charged jets" somewhere. 

Good idea, I added this to the abstract and the introduction.

 - General: A+A and p+p --> $A$ + $A$ and $p$ + $p$

Changed.

 - Genera: Zr + Zr and Ru + Ru --> to be consistent with atomic and mass numbersL or not (for example L28 and L31) 

My idea of using the mass number once was so that readers could quickly reference it, since it is not a commonly analyzed species in our field.  However, given using it everywhere or nowhere, I think I will go with having it nowhere and instead mention that each has 96 nucleons.

 - v_2^{jet}: "jet" looks a bit large to me (it seems to have the same font size as normal text), do you know why? 

 - L18 - L20: Do you need to use bold here? 

Not sure why that was bolded, must have been from an editing pass and I missed it.  Removed!

 - L19: These --> these

Fixed.

 - L27: I would merge this line to the previous one, it is a bit strange to me that a paragraph only has one line. But it is entirely up to you. 

Changed.

 - L54: 0.4, 0.6 --> 0.4, and 0.6

Changed

 - L58: [8] --> Ref. [8] 

Changed

 - L60, Eq.(3): it would be good if pT^{reco} can be mentioned somewhere before, for example "pT^{reco} is the reconstructed jet transverse momentum"

 - L83: 0.4, 0.6 --> 0.4, and 0.6

Changed.

 - L83: figure 1 --> Fig. 1

Changed.

 - L86 - 91: you should mention Figure 2 somewhere in this paragraph. 

Added a reference to it after introducing the measurement. 

 - L103: Ongoing work to further this goal --> Ongoing work to this goal... (since there is another "further" later, I would remove the first one.) 

Good idea, changed.

On Jul 13, 2023, at 9:33 PM, Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Tristan,

Thanks a lot for the well-written proceedings, I only have some minor comments for your consideration. 

 - General: it would be good to specifically mention this is the v2 for "charged jets" somewhere. 

 - General: A+A and p+p --> $A$ + $A$ and $p$ + $p$

 - Genera: Zr + Zr and Ru + Ru --> to be consistent with atomic and mass numbersL or not (for example L28 and L31) 

 - v_2^{jet}: "jet" looks a bit large to me (it seems to have the same font size as normal text), do you know why? 

 - L18 - L20: Do you need to use bold here? 

 - L19: These --> these

 - L27: I would merge this line to the previous one, it is a bit strange to me that a paragraph only has one line. But it is entirely up to you. 

 - L54: 0.4, 0.6 --> 0.4, and 0.6

 - L58: [8] --> Ref. [8] 

 - L60, Eq.(3): it would be good if pT^{reco} can be mentioned somewhere before, for example "pT^{reco} is the reconstructed jet transverse momentum"

 - L83: 0.4, 0.6 --> 0.4, and 0.6

 - L83: figure 1 --> Fig. 1

 - L86 - 91: you should mention Figure 2 somewhere in this paragraph. 

 - L103: Ongoing work to further this goal --> Ongoing work to this goal... (since there is another "further" later, I would remove the first one.) 

Cheers,

Yi

On Mon, Jul 3, 2023 at 11:54 PM webmaster--- via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Tristan Protzman (tlp220 AT lehigh.edu) has submitted a material for a review, 
please have a look:
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