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["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi Yan,

Thanks for addressing my comments. I sign off.

Best,

Isaac

On Jul 15, 2023, at 4:27 PM, Mooney, Isaac <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu> wrote:

Hi Yan,

Very nice proceedings. See below for some small comments, and sorry for the delay.

Thanks,

Isaac

8. 

Three “the”s  are missing in the second sentence (one also in the fifth sentence).

"compared to previous measurements"

The mention of Minimum-Bias events and BEMC-triggered events is more detail than necessary in the abstract. Please remove.

12. "so-called" -> "called the" (and on 21)

21. "regeneration effects"

23. Upright Ru and Zr for consistency with the rest of the species labels (also on 38). Also consistent spacing between the "+" and the species.

34. ", in" -> ". In" or ", but in"

38. Remove "sample"

39. I would combine this with the previous sentence: "The data used in this analysis are 4 billion events from ^96_44Ru+^96_44Ru..."

41. "event-level"

43. 

"utilized to address the combinatorial..."; citation for Mixed-Event technique.

It isn't clear from this paragraph why you need two different techniques for the two different triggers. 

45. Missing “the”

47. "EPD", "TPCW", etc. should be upright in math environments for readability.

49. Equation 1 should be moved up to just after "is obtained using"

Fig. 1. Can you add to the caption some language specifying which direction centrality increases? E.g. "...in 6 centralities of isobaric collisions, with the most central range in (a) and the least in (d)."

57. "in semi-central"

63. "The isobar results, characterized by their high precision, are"

64. Extra space after the "Fig."s

65. "peripheral isobar collisions"

68. It would be fine if you wanted to drop the \sqrt{s_{NN}} after the first usage in the sentence, but if you don't do that it should be consistent throughout, so AuAu 54.4 should also have a \sqrt{s_{NN}}.

71. It's not just that they exhibit the same trend, right? It's also the degree of suppression which is roughly consistent throughout at a given <N_part>.

Fig. 3. "where the shaded bands..."

79. "Furthermore, the result of integrating p_{T} over the ranges...is shown in..."

81. "This hints at a" (also in 87).

On Jul 15, 2023, at 1:22 PM, wy157543--- via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Yi，

Thank you for your nice comments.

This is the new version, please have a look:

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Hard-Probes-2023/Jpsi-production-RuRu-and-ZrZr-collisions-200-GeV-STAR-experiment

best,

Yan

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Hi Yi，

Thank you for your nice comments.

This is the new version, please have a look:

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/HP_Proceedings_YanWang_v3.pdf

best,

Yan

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Hi Yan,

Thanks a lot for the updated version. I have some follow-up minor comments. Don't worry about the figures. 

 - L8: in isobaric collisions --> in Zr+Zr and Ru+Ru collisions 

 - Systematics: I still don't see any description and discussion about systematics in the text. Are you planning to mention it in the text?

Cheers,

Yi

On Fri, Jul 14, 2023 at 6:11 PM <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn> wrote:

Thank you for your nice commments.

Figure 1: is it possible to move it to page 4, and make Figure 2 a bit smaller so you can fit them together on page 4?

for this commments I try , but It is hard to make fig1 and fig2 on one page. 

This is the new version:

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/HP_Proceedings_YanWang_v2.pdf

best,

Yan

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Dear Yan,

Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I have some minor comments for your consideration. 

 - General: you didn't mention systematics (only in the plot) in the analyses. It would be good to add some information of the systematics study and point out which are the dominant ones for both analyses. 

 - L8: v2 in isobaric collisions --> elliptic flow (v2) in the same collision systems 

 - L8: Remove "(SP)"

 - L10: Quantum chromodynamics --> Quantum Chromodynamics or quantum chromodynamics (I would suggest to use the later one to be consistent with the quark-gluon plasma 

 - L17: LHC --> the LHC

 - L22: isobaric --> Zr+Zr and Ru+Ru

 - L22: less --> smaller

 - L25: feed-down --> feed-down from the excited states 

 - L36 - 38: I would move this sentence to L22 after "depend on the size of collision systems". Then in the future you can use "isobaric collisions" to refer to the Zr+Zr and Ru+Ru collisions. 

 - L41: statistic --> statistics 

 - L42: J/psi is constructed --> The J/psi candidates are constructed 

 - L43: Need to briefly introduce TPC, TOF and BEMC (at least spell them out). Also please add references for them. 

 - L45 - 46: "Then v2 is calculated by the definition." --> Need to add a reference for the definition.  

 - L46: formula 1 --> Eq. 1

 - L47: Need to introduce EPD first

 - Figure 1: is it possible to move it to page 4, and make Figure 2 a bit smaller so you can fit them together on page 4? 

 - Equation 1: need to add some information for the symbol in this equation. Define Q2, POI, Q2, EPD, Q2 TPCW/E... 

 - L49: Fig. 1 --> Figure 1 

 - L49: Nuclear --> nuclear 

 - L54: centralitie --> centralities 

 - L63: The Nuclear modification factor RAA --> The RAA 

 - L63: Figure 2 --> Fig. 2

 - L69: Fig.3 (a) --> Figure 3 (a) 

 - L74: Figure 3(b) --> Fig. 3 (b) 

 - L80: v2 --> The J/psi v2 

 

Cheers,

Yi

  

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