STAR HardProbes PWG

[Helen Caines <helen.caines AT yale.edu>]

HI Tristan,

 Thanks for producing a nice first draft of your poster. Below are some comments to consider

Helen

General: You could increase the font side of all your text, you seem to have enough white space in each box.

Abstract: 

 collectively known as the jet quenching —>  collectively known as jet quenching

he QGP takes an approximately —> the QGP initially takes an approximately

Jet v2:

Add to your cartoon how the variables phi and Psi_2 are defined. 

Combinatorial jets:

 I assume I am supposed to see that this is true from the figure with the toy model? It would be good to somehow refer to this figure and what is show in the text

Bullets 3-5 describe the “hard core” technique, I therefore suggest to make them sub bullets.

The sqrt(delta(eta^2delta(phi)^2) comments refers to jets I believe. Would be good to make this clear given you take about constituents at the start of the sentence.

Didn’t you mention in the HP meeting that for the O+O you don’t modulate the flow, this should be made clear in the last bullet

Event Plane section:

The figure is for  |eta| or really only positive eta? 

RuRu and ZrZr results:

put high pT tracks in blue to match your text color coding for the jets?

hard core matched jets —> hard core matched charged jets

O+O results:

to jet 𝑣, observed in p+Pb? —> to jet 𝑣, observed by ATLAS in sqrt(s_NN) =  8.16 TeV p+Pb collisions? [Since you call out ALICE above you should call out ATLAS here).

R dependence:

Suggest to call out in title that this is for the Isobars. Also suggest that this be moved above O+O panel so all the Isobar results are together. 

No evidence for R dependence of jet 𝑣, for hard core selected jets [ I agree with this, but consider acknowledging that the uncertainties are still very large - is this a measurement you (or the next student not trying to hold up graduation) could repeat in Au-Au where we have good stats and the EPD now?

Summary: 

is mid-central  —> in mid-central 

is observed —> are observed

Given all the datasets STAR has, I suggest adding that again here that these measurements are for 200 GeV

Reference:

NN needs to be subscripted (twice)

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