STAR HardProbes PWG

["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi Yuan,

Sorry for my delay in giving you some feedback. With these comments 
implemented, I sign off.

Thanks,
Isaac

29. "a more refined measurement" is not very descriptive. It would be great 
if you could mention what is actually different between a measurement of RAA 
and a measurement of the z of the D0. For example, with the D0-jet 
measurements the reconstructed jet helps you recover some of the lost energy 
of the quark. Or whatever you see as a potential motivation.

30.
        "where \hat{p}_{T,jet} projects the hadron transverse momentum onto 
the jet axis". This doesn't quite make sense to me as written. Can you check 
it and possibly revise?
        I would consider moving the zjet definition to the section where you 
discuss the D0-jet results. This is kind of distracting from the exposition 
of the measurement, and you already need to define DeltaR there anyway, so 
might as well do both of them at once. Here you could just talk about the 
fragmentation function, and later on can connect that to the z once you've 
defined it.

59. This is a bit of an odd way to start this paragraph. This is the first 
time you're mentioning mT here. It would be good to back up a step and say 
instead ~"we do a fit to the mT spectra in isobar collisions to extract an 
effective temperature, Teff, from the inverse slope parameter." Then you can 
come back to say "The range on this fit... [3]." Then the third sentence can 
describe the figure. [By the way, I'm sure that most people reading these 
proceedings will know what mT is, but it isn't a bad idea to quickly give the 
definition since it doesn't take up too much space].

63. "may acquire less collective behavior than light hadrons"?

65. "systematically dependent" -> "dependent on the system size"?

89. This statement about MPI could be elaborated on. In Neil's talk, he 
mentions that the authors claim that due to the low pT threshold of the D0, 
MPI may become relevant, which you could mention here. Then it makes a bit 
more sense to the reader why you're specifying that secondary partonic 
interactions are not included in the model comparison. I think it would also 
be better to mention the "MPI = off" aspect when you first introduce the 
model. E.g. "The LIDO model [10]...in central 0-10% collisions. This may be 
due to the low D0 pT threshold, which may lead to an important contribution 
from MPI which are not included in this model." or similar. Speaking of the 
model, I think you also have space in the Summary to include a statement 
about the model agreement/disagreement.

Fig. 3 Since you do currently have a bit of space, it would be great if you 
could make these panels a bit bigger if at all possible.

> On Dec 5, 2023, at 11:48 AM, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l 
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> Hello Yuan,
>
> Thank you for implementing my comments.
> Here is an additional comment. With this implemented, I sign off.
>
> L73:  In this work, the minimum bias datasets are collected in Au+Au 
> collisions at √sNN = 200 GeV in the year 2014.
> -> In this analysis, the minimum bias Au+Au collisions at √sNN = 200 GeV 
> data, taken in the year 2014, is used.
>
>
> Best
> Nihar
>
> On 2023-12-04 22:41, suyuann AT mail.ustc.edu.cn wrote:
>> Hi Nihar,
>> Thanks a lot for your nice comments, please find the update version:
>> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66071
>> Best regards,
>> Yuan
>>> -----原始邮件-----
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>>> 发送时间: 2023-12-04 11:43:37 (星期一)
>>> 收件人: suyuann AT mail.ustc.edu.cn
>>> 抄送: "STAR HardProbes PWG" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>, 
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>>> 主题: Re: [Star-hp-l] STAR presentation by Yuan Su for Quark Matter 2023 
>>> submitted for review
>>> Hello Yuan,
>>> Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.
>>> L7: We report the first measurements of.. -> We report the measurements
>>> of…
>>> _     transverse momentum pT -> transverse momentum (pT)
>>> L11:  modification factor RAA is observed -> modification factor is
>>> observed
>>> L14:  in 200 GeV Au+Au collisions ->  in √sNN = 200 GeV at Au+Au
>>> collisions
>>>  L14-17: "We show the nuclear modi- fication factor RCP of D0-tagged
>>> jets as a function of pT,Jet and zJet. Additionally, the radial profile
>>> of the D0 mesons in these tagged jets are obtained with 1 < pT,D0 < 10
>>> GeV/c for different centrality classes." -> Let's concise it.
>>> "we present the nuclear modification factor and radial profile of
>>> D^0-tagged jets with 1 < pT,D0 < 10 GeV/c. "
>>> L22: They are expected to suffer… ->They lose energy due to interactions
>>> with the medium; hence studying heavy quark in heavy-ion collisions can
>>> shed light on the QGP properties.
>>> L24: …modification factor RAA was …-> …modification factor, RAA, was …
>>> L32: you need to mention what are these pT,hadron, and pTjet are in z?
>>> L36:.  …jets can help constrain theoretical … -> … jets can help to
>>> constraint the theoretical…
>>>                     parton mass and -> parton mass, and
>>> L38-40: In this proceedings,… -> These lines are needed, in stead you
>>> can discuss more on the topics.
>>> L44: are directly used -> are used
>>> L48: in the 200 GeV isobar collisions -> in isobar collisions at
>>> \sNN=200 GeV
>>> L49.        Figure  1. -> Fig.1 [Elsewhere inside the sentence; L58, L66, 
>>> L71,
>>> L84, L89]
>>> L50: at 200 GeV -> at \sNN=200 GeV; Mention what is <N_bin>?
>>> L51:        Vertical lines and … , respectively. ->  remove this sentence 
>>> here
>>> and include in the caption of Fig.1
>>> L52-53:The generally consistent indicates that the D^0… -> The D^0
>>> production …
>>> L55: Levy fits -> the Levy fit; "… GeV/c and plotted by dot lines. " ->
>>> "… GeV/c." remover rest. [data point description you can put in the
>>> caption]
>>> L56: And D0 yields in …by solid lines. -> Remove this sentence, not
>>> needed.
>>> L60:        …collisions has an obvious suppression effect … -> …collisions
>>> show suppression at pT > 3 GeV/c,..
>>> L62: Mention and cite the model predictions.
>>> Figure 2 caption: Blast-Wave fits -> the Blast-wave fits
>>> L64: inverse slope parameter Teff  -> inverse slope parameter, Teff,
>>> L65: in 200 GeV -> in \sNN = 200 GeV
>>> L67:                the singular and charm hadrons -> what is "singular" 
>>> here?  This
>>> sentence is not clear.
>>> L71: present BW fit -> present the Blast-wave fit
>>> kinetic freeze-out temperature Tkin -> kinetic freeze-out temperature,
>>> Tkin,
>>> L71-73: This entire sentence is not needed. And Not clear .
>>> L75-76:     …a similar dynamic process in the bulk medium with respect to
>>> Au + Au collisions. -> Not clear, please rephrase
>>> L79:        The data sets in this work… ->  In this work, the minimum bias
>>> datasets are collected in Au+Au
>>> L80: from RHIC run year 2014. -> in the year 2014.
>>> L82: Rcp: mention centralities
>>> L87: …              the D0 tagged jet invariant yields in peripheral, but
>>> underestimates in central collisions. -> No figure is included in this
>>> proceedings. Right?
>>> L88: what is TAA? Mention it.
>>> L89: zJet: here this is different notation compared with L32; make it
>>> consistent
>>> L95: LIDO model (MPI = off) … -> The LIDO model     () describes the ratio
>>> of radial profile in the data.
>>> … mention what is MPI
>>> L98: To summarize, we reported … -> We report
>>> L102:               while light hadrons may be -> Either remove this or 
>>> mention
>>> "while light hadrons show negligible difference."
>>> L102:And the strong suppression of D0 nuclear modification factor RAA is
>>> -> The strong suppression of D0 nuclear modification factor is
>>> L104: D^0 tagged jet suppression
>>> Best
>>> Nihar
>>> On 2023-12-03 20:16, suyuann AT mail.ustc.edu.cn wrote:
>>> > Hi Nihar,
>>> >
>>> > Thank you for your comment. Please find the update version:
>>> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66071
>>> >
>>> > Best regards,
>>> > Yuan
>>> >
>>> >
>>> >> -----原始邮件-----
>>> >> 发件人: "Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
>>> >> 发送时间: 2023-12-04 01:09:27 (星期一)
>>> >> 收件人: "STAR HardProbes PWG" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
>>> >> 抄送: "Nihar Sahoo" <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>, webmaster AT star.bnl.gov
>>> >> 主题: Re: [Star-hp-l] STAR presentation by Yuan Su for Quark Matter 2023
>>> >> submitted for review
>>> >>
>>> >> Hello Yuan,
>>> >>
>>> >> Can you please add line numbers in your proceedings?
>>> >> It helps.
>>> >>
>>> >> Thank you
>>> >> Nihar
>>> >>
>>> >>
>>> >> On 2023-11-23 21:10, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
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>>> >> >
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