STAR HardProbes PWG

[wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn]

Hi Isaac,

I'm sorry I missed this email, thank you very much for your comments. There 
may not be time to ask Dandan to draw a new picture, so I deleted the left 
picture of the original picture 2 because the right picture can contain the 
same information.
Because there is enough space to introduce the differences and meanings of 
the two reference frames, I have quoted relevant literature, which has 
detailed introductions.

The new version can be found in this link:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66082
best,
Yan


> -----原始邮件-----
> 发件人: "Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>
> 发送时间: 2023-12-09 05:55:44 (星期六)
> 收件人: "STAR HardProbes PWG" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> 抄送: Yan <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>, "Nihar Sahoo" 
> <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>, "webmaster AT star.bnl.gov" <webmaster AT star.bnl.gov>
> 主题: [SPAM] Re: [Star-hp-l] STAR presentation by Yan Wang for Quark Matter 
> 2023 submitted for review
> 
> Hi Yan,
> 
> Sorry for my late response (I had the deadline mixed up in my head). At 
> this point the proceedings look very nice. I have some further comments 
> below for your consideration. With these addressed, I sign off.
> 
> Thanks,
> Isaac
> 
> 58. It would be nice to elaborate a bit here. The statement that the double 
> ratio is closer to SPS than the LHC doesn't tell the reader very much with 
> no additional context. You could mention something about the rapidity and 
> CM ranges and how they relate to the STAR results. This doesn't require any 
> speculation about why the data would be closer in trend to the SPS results, 
> and at least gives a bit more detail. I would also be a bit less strong 
> about the better agreement with SPS results since within uncertainties on 
> the STAR and ALICE results it looks like they are consistent. Some wiggle 
> word would be good, e.g. "hint" or "potential" or similar.
> 
> 62. Remove one of the "notably"s
> 
> 64. The polarization result doesn't feel like it is getting appropriate 
> consideration. I understand you have very limited space, but there is no 
> discussion of what polarization tells us, how it was measured (e.g. decay 
> channel), what the different reference frames mean, what it would mean 
> physically to get a non-zero polarization, or even whether we see a 
> non-zero polarization in the plots (you say there is no dependence on pT or 
> centrality, but not that it is consistent with any particular value, until 
> the conclusion paragraph). To me although it is good to see that indeed 
> lambda_inv is consistent between the two frames, it might be better to just 
> present the lambda_phi and lambda_theta since that saves you a row of Fig. 
> 4, and with that space you can discuss the measurement and its implications 
> a bit more. If you wanted to mention the consistency of lambda_inv, you 
> still could, just saying "...between the two frames (not shown)..."
> 
> Fig. 4. Aesthetic comment: would it be possible to make the figures the 
> same size?
> 
> > On Dec 8, 2023, at 9:56 AM, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l 
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > Hello Yan,
> >
> > Thank you for implementing my comments.
> > I sign off.
> >
> > Best
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2023-12-04 22:26, wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn wrote:
> >> Hi Nihar,
> >> Thank you for your nice comments.
> >> Due to space constraints, not all references are listed (those using
> >> their data points are prioritized)
> >> The new version can be found in this link:
> >> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66082
> >> best,
> >> Yan
> >>> -----原始邮件-----
> >>> 发件人: "Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> >>> 发送时间: 2023-12-04 10:34:43 (星期一)
> >>> 收件人: "STAR HardProbes PWG" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> >>> 抄送: "Nihar Sahoo" <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>, webmaster AT star.bnl.gov
> >>> 主题: Re: [Star-hp-l] STAR presentation by Yan Wang for Quark Matter 2023 
> >>> submitted for review
> >>> Hello Yan,
> >>> Please find below my comments on your nice proceedings.
> >>> General:
> >>> J/ψ -> make "J" italic all places
> >>> isobaric collisions -> isobar collisions
> >>> L7:We report on quarkonium (J/ψ and ψ(2S)) measurements -> We report the
> >>> measurements of quarkonium (J/ψ and ψ(2S))
> >>> L15:        in both Helicity and Collins-Soper frames -> in both the 
> >>> helicity
> >>> and the Collins-Soper frames
> >>> L15-16: a new angle -> a new insight ;
> >>> in these collisions -> in heavy-ion collisions
> >>> L21: "The anticipated dissociation …" -> give references
> >>> L24:        Alongside dissociation in the medium -> Alongside the 
> >>> dissociation
> >>> in the medium
> >>>       effects -> the effects
> >>> L25: to the experimentally measured yields -> to the measured yields
> >>> L25-24: Give references
> >>> L33: J/psi -> The J/psi
> >>> L34: applying event-level -> applying the event-level
> >>>             quality cuts -> selections ["quality cuts" is a jargon, 
> >>> avoid it in
> >>> writing]
> >>> "After applying event-level and track quality cuts,…" -> After applying
> >>> good event and track selection criteria, the electron
> >>> L36:        Considering the absence of inclusive -> Due to 
> >>> unavailability of
> >>> inclusive …
> >>> L40:        figure 1 -> Fig.1. [same 45 and 67]
> >>> L41: for energies of -> at \sNN=
> >>> L46: This could result from a -> This could be due to a combination…
> >>> L47:calculation ,  -> calculation,
> >>> L48: describe data with an indication of underestimation at 27 GeV and
> >>> below.->    describe the data but quantitatively underestimates below 
> >>> \sNN
> >>> = 27 GeV.
> >>> L51: isobaric collisions -> isobar collisions [elsewhere]
> >>> L61: is significant lower  ->               is significantly lower 
> >>> [same in L75]
> >>> L68:   of λinv between -> mention what is λinv ?
> >>> Fig.3 caption: "For measurements from heavy-ion collisions, the error…"
> >>> -> The error… [same for Fig,2]
> >>> Best
> >>> Nihar
> >>> On 2023-11-25 00:08, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> >>> > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> >>> >
> >>> > Yan Wang (wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn) has submitted a material for a
> >>> > review,
> >>> > please have a look:
> >>> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66082
> >>> >
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