STAR HardProbes PWG

["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi Monika,

Good job on these proceedings. I have some mostly small comments for your 
consideration below.

Thanks,
Isaac

At the top, should say "Proceedings"; "Journal Not Specified" -> "Universe"; 
title is missing in the Citation on the left side of pg. 1

40: It would be good to have some comment that this technique will be amended 
in the final paper, maybe in a footnote. And given that the method will 
change, I don't think quite as much space should be dedicated to the 
description. I understand that these are proceedings for a conference that 
was over a year ago, but we also want to make sure people don't read it and 
get inspired to go out and apply a similar technique in their analyses, even 
if it has a small effect in the case of your analysis.

70: "become harder and more collinear"

74: "distributions"

77: EE4C isn't really the name of the tune although I know we've called it 
that in the past as a kind of shorthand. UE-EE-4-CTEQ6L1 would be more 
appropriate, although if I'm remembering correctly I think there are some 
changes from the nominal tune parameter values in the Herwig sample Raghav 
ran, if you're using that (for example the p_(T,0)^min value is actually the 
one from UE-EE-5-CTEQ6L1, unless it was changed in more recent running). If 
that's the case, it would be good to describe it as "a slightly modified 
UE-EE-4-CTEQ6L1 tune" or something like that.

78: "angular-ordered"

83: I think since these are conclusions rather than a summary, there should 
be a bit more of a physics message than there is at the moment. For example, 
you point out that there is a resemblance between zg at the third split and 
zg at narrow angle at the first split, but leave it at that. It could be 
mentioned that this is consistent with angular ordering without going too far 
to say that it implies it. You could also mention the flattening of zg being 
consistent with (although again not necessarily conclusively indicative of) 
an evolution to a more non-perturbative regime.

86: "a resemblance between the trends of the zg distribution..." because as 
written it's worded a bit confusingly.

88: "will explore"

95: The author is messed up here and in refs. 3, 7, and 10. Also not sure you 
need both "STAR" and "K. H. Ackermann et al." here and in ref. 5.

> On Jan 12, 2024, at 1:01 PM, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l 
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
>
> Monika Robotkova (robotmon AT fjfi.cvut.cz) has submitted a material for a
> review, please have a look:
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66558
>
> ---
> If you have any problems with the review process, please contact
> webmaster@http://www.star.bnl.gov/
> _______________________________________________
> Star-hp-l mailing list
> Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov
> https://lists.bnl.gov/mailman/listinfo/star-hp-l