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["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi Brennan,

I have a few comments, below, on your abstract.

Thanks,

Isaac

Add "p+p collisions" somewhere in the title

Can you change sqrt(...) to the square root symbol?

I know that a J/psi measurement at 500/510 has already been done using the 2011/3 datasets, so I understand why you're saying "A new high-statistics measurement". But since the multiplicity-dependence wasn't done then, it might be better to frame it not as an updated measurement with higher statistics, but rather the first time this dependence of the production has been measured at ~500 GeV. So it would be good to change these first two sentences to "Complementing existing measurements at both... of inclusive J/psi production versus event multiplicity, we present the first multiplicity-dependent J/psi production measurement in 510 GeV pp collisions. A faster-than-linear rise is found..." or something like that (order could also be flipped: "We present..., complementing existing...").

General: there isn't really a motivation in your abstract. Of course, it's Hard Probes so not as much as usual is needed, but I do think it would be better to make some statement at the beginning about what multiplicity-dependent J/psi measurements can tell us about QCD/why we would perform them.

On May 13, 2024, at 03:26, Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Brennan,

Thanks a lot for the nice abstract. 

I have some comments for your consideration. 

 - Add your name and affiliation after the title. 

 - General: the abstract reads okay to me, but just a bit weak. Probably you can emphase this precision measurement can constrain the model more. 

Cheers,

Yi

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