STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Andrew,

Thank you for your nice abstract.
Please find my comment below.

1) please include "For the STAR collaboration"
2)"Charge-Energy" and "charge-weighted ENCs" -> I think you refer to 
charged particles' energy correlations.
If yes, I think something can be improved in the wordings.
Otherwise, it sounds like "charge-energy correlation"

Besides, It seems like we are going to introduce a different name 
"Charge-Energy" Correlators comparing with the EEC paper draft.
Can we make it consistent? And this "charge" is a technical details 
(selecting charged particles for correlator) that can be included in the 
text.

Best
Nihar


On 2024-05-14 03:09, Andrew Tamis via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Will upload to drupal, but sending here for now as it seems to be
> facing some slow-down
>
> Best,
> Andrew
>
> On Mon, May 13, 2024 at 5:37 PM Andrew Tamis <andrew.tamis AT yale.edu>
> wrote:
>
> > Hi Isaac,
> >
> > Thank you very much for the comments, I have implemented them,
> > please let me know if the point of "close to the massive case" has
> > been made clear.  I have split it into two sentences now beginning
> > at the end of line 14, as I believe it is a truly important point
> > about the unique capabilities of STAR for this measurement.  I have
> > saved space by merging the two sentences of paragraph one into one,
> > so let me know if this reads well as well.
> >
> > Additionally, I have reworked the title, so feedback would be
> > appreciated on that as well.
> >
> > Best,
> > Andrew
> >
> > On Mon, May 13, 2024 at 2:56 PM Mooney, Isaac via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > Hi Andrew,
> >
> > Here are a few more small comments along with a replication of the
> > comments I just gave you offline in your office so there is a
> > record.
> >
> > Thanks,
> > Isaac
> >
> > Sentence 1: You did a great job making the abstract general to the
> > N-point correlator for any N, but we discussed here removing
> > “projected” and moving it to the first sentence of paragraph 2
> > because this sentence is valid for projected or non-projected
> > correlators whereas you measure specifically the projected one.
> > Sentence 2: “approximately separates”
> > Sentence 3: “at which hadron groups with different charge
> > compositions” or similar
> > Paragraph 2, sentence 1: “We will present”
> > Sentence 3: “at RHIC energies compared to LHC energies”
> > : Please revise to make “close to the massive case” and
> > “observation of the non-perturbative effects of …” more clear
> > especially for a reader not familiar with EECs.
> > Last sentence: “are presented”.
> >
> > On May 13, 2024, at 02:14, Yi Yang via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > Hi Andrew,
> >
> > Thanks a lot. I don't have any further comments.
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Yi
> >
> > On Thu, May 9, 2024 at 11:32 PM Andrew Tamis via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > Hi Yi,
> >
> > Thank you very much for the suggestion, i have implimented it.
> >
> > Best,
> > Andrew
> >
> > On Wed, May 8, 2024 at 10:03 PM Yi Yang via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > Hi Andrew,
> >
> > Thanks a lot for the well-written abstract.
> > I only have one minor suggestion for your consideration.
> > - at STAR sqrt(s) --> at STAR collision energies
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Yi
> >
> > On Wed, May 8, 2024 at 1:27 AM webmaster--- via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> >
> > Andrew Tamis (andrew.tamis AT yale.edu) has submitted a material for a
> > review,
> > please have a look:
> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/67701
> >
> > Deadline: 2024-05-25
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