STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Xiaofeng Luo <xfluo.star AT hotmail.com>]

Hi Hanna,

    Nice proceedings.
    Please find my comments/suggestions below :

    1.  If the presentation is on behalf of STAR, please add "for the 
STAR Collaboration"

    2,  Comparing the length of the abstract and summary, the abstract 
is much longer than summary.
        You may consider to balance their length.

    3.  Line 56, I am not sure the Fig. 4,  the v2 > 0 should be 
considered the signal/evidence of onset of QGP.
         Title of 2.1: Onset of QGP. maybe change to BES-I v2 
measurement.  And state that 3 GeV is hadronic dominated.

    4.  Line 62, indicating the existence of the critical behavior -> 
indicating of the first order phase transition.
         For 1st order phase transition, you may also use the famous 
dV1/dy of proton vs. energy to discuss.
        Maybe you can merge the section of 2.2 and 2.3, and use the 
title : Search for the first order phase transition and CP ?

    5.  Line 67, most central and peripheral collisions separately -> 
most central collisions.

    6.  Section 2.4,  there is no mention in the discussion below, how 
the measurement is related to or reflect the  title "Chiral symmetry 
restoration".  If not, I would suggest to change the title to reflect 
the measurement. Please also mention the energy points that is shown in 
Fig 7.

    7.  Line 81-82:  the phase transition is predicted -> the phase 
transition predicted.


    With those implemented, I sign off.


Thank you,
Best Regards，
Xiaofeng


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