STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>]

Hi Xiaofeng,

Hi Hanna,

    Nice proceedings.
    Please find my comments/suggestions below :

    1.  If the presentation is on behalf of STAR, please add "for the STAR Collaboration"

Done. 

    2,  Comparing the length of the abstract and summary, the abstract is much longer than summary.
        You may consider to balance their length.

I have the page limit of 6 pages. If I add any content to the Summary, I will start 7th page. According to the ICHEP styles, the abstract, no matter how short or long is, it fits exactly 1 page, so it dos not matter if I shorten it.. I would prefer to keep as it is now, otherwise I will have to reduce some content belonging to the main contribution.

    3.  Line 56, I am not sure the Fig. 4,  the v2 > 0 should be considered the signal/evidence of onset of QGP.
         Title of 2.1: Onset of QGP. maybe change to BES-I v2 measurement.  And state that 3 GeV is hadronic dominated.

Done.

    4.  Line 62, indicating the existence of the critical behavior -> indicating of the first order phase transition.

Done.

         For 1st order phase transition, you may also use the famous dV1/dy of proton vs. energy to discuss.

Herę I am afraid I don’t have any free space to accommodate. 

        Maybe you can merge the section of 2.2 and 2.3, and use the title : Search for the first order phase transition and CP ?

Done.

    5.  Line 67, most central and peripheral collisions separately -> most central collisions.

Done.

    6.  Section 2.4,  there is no mention in the discussion below, how the measurement is related to or reflect the  title "Chiral symmetry restoration".  If not, I would suggest to change the title to reflect the measurement. Please also mention the energy points that is shown in Fig 7.

Done

    7.  Line 81-82:  the phase transition is predicted -> the phase transition predicted.


    With those implemented, I sign off.

Thank you very much.

Corrected proceedings are located at the same location.

Thanks,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

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Wiadomość napisana przez Xiaofeng Luo via Star-cf-l <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> w dniu 14.11.2022, o godz. 10:57:

Hi Hanna,

    Nice proceedings.
    Please find my comments/suggestions below :

    1.  If the presentation is on behalf of STAR, please add "for the STAR Collaboration"

    2,  Comparing the length of the abstract and summary, the abstract is much longer than summary.
        You may consider to balance their length.

    3.  Line 56, I am not sure the Fig. 4,  the v2 > 0 should be considered the signal/evidence of onset of QGP.
         Title of 2.1: Onset of QGP. maybe change to BES-I v2 measurement.  And state that 3 GeV is hadronic dominated.

    4.  Line 62, indicating the existence of the critical behavior -> indicating of the first order phase transition.
         For 1st order phase transition, you may also use the famous dV1/dy of proton vs. energy to discuss.
        Maybe you can merge the section of 2.2 and 2.3, and use the title : Search for the first order phase transition and CP ?

    5.  Line 67, most central and peripheral collisions separately -> most central collisions.

    6.  Section 2.4,  there is no mention in the discussion below, how the measurement is related to or reflect the  title "Chiral symmetry restoration".  If not, I would suggest to change the title to reflect the measurement. Please also mention the energy points that is shown in Fig 7.

    7.  Line 81-82:  the phase transition is predicted -> the phase transition predicted.


    With those implemented, I sign off.


Thank you,
Best Regards，
Xiaofeng


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