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Toshihiro Nonaka ( tnonaka AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Zachary Sweger ( zwsweger AT ucdavis.edu ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Rencontres-de-Moriond/Recent-Results-and-Future-Prospects-STAR-Beam-Energy-Scan-Progra

Comment:
Dear Zach,

Below are  my comments on your nice slides for your considerations.

Best regards,
Toshihiro

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General:
- On the references
-- The web links need to be removed from all references. Or you could add the 
 
link to all references.
- - Remove the title of the papers for simplicity

p7:
- "Beam Energy Scan (BES)" -> "Beam Energy Scan and Fixed Target Programs  
(BES-I, BES-II, FXT)"
- "BES program scans phase..." -> "Scanning phase ..."
p9: It might be informative to add the width of the target
p10: "Hanna Zbroszczyk, CPOD2021"
p13,14: remove the title and link of the paper (bottom left)
p15,16: Remove "Dissertation" (bottom left)
p17: "Phys.Lett.B 827.137003(2022)", remove the link to the paper (bottom  
right)
p19-22: "Proton Stopping in Au+Au Collisions"
p23: "arXiv:0903.0669", remove the title and link to the paper
p24:
- "Beam nergy Scan I" -> "BES-I"
- You probably need to define BES-I and BES-II somewhere around page 7.
- 1st bullet: "Nonmonotonic collision energy dependence of kurtosis of..."
- 2nd bullet: "Counting (anti)protons,"
- 3rd bullet: "nonmonotonicity with 3.1σ significance"
- Remove the link to the paper, add the author (bottom right)
- Change the style of the volume numbers "38", "126" to the fine font.
p25-27:
- Replace "arXiv:2209.11940" to "Phys.Rev.C 107.024908(2023)"
- You may want to specify which reference presents new 3 GeV results.
p26-27:
- 2nd bullet: FXT program will cover...
p27: 3rd bullet "... recollected at BES-I energies below 20 GeV (BES-II)"
p28-29:
- Remove the title and link to the paper, change the volume number to the  
fine font (bottom right)
- "STAR, Science 328, 58-62(2010)" Remove the link to the paper, change  
"SCIENCE" to the fine font.
p31:
- 1st bullet: "BES-II and FXT programs"
- 2nd bullet: "AuAu" -> "Au+Au"

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