STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Hanna Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>]

Dear Daniel,

Thank you for submitting your presentation in time.

Please find below my comments for you:

S1: I suggest adding a one paragraph break between the tittle of your presentation and your name and another one between your name and the name of conference

S2: I suggest to increase the size of your fonts and to add some content to the right size (figure / graphic / whatever you find as useful)

S4: I suggest to change = to /rightarrow in all, four places

Lattice QCD works -> Lattice QCD calculations available

You may add a bullet that we have cross-over transition here  (high \sqrt{s_{NN}}, low \mu_B)

Critical Point -> Critical Point? (As it’s not obvious whether it exists)

S5: I suggest to add that this is the motivation of Au-Au heavy-ion collision programs

First stage -> High collision energies program: QGP properties

Second stage -> Beam Energy Scan program I, II (including FXT):

- onset on deconfinemet,

- 1st order phase transition

- Critical Point

S14: Star Detector -> BES program

You can show also here the QCD phase diagram from S5 (as it nicely illustrates the coverage of the collision energies)

S18: I suggest to remove the last bullet, but putting a reference that this figure is taken from CPOD’23

Increase font size of text please

S19: as here you have only 2 bullets, I suggest to add them to the previous slide

S22: define \epsilon_F with a formula

It will be good to add a conclusion from this slide, e.g. that no phase transition indicated, and that these results are consistent with the scenario of cross-over transition

Increase the font size please

S23: CP?-> critical behavior? (Since the location of the CP here is questionable)

S24: add reference to the figure and add references to EoS included in these calculations

Except sensitivity to the EoS, please mention that all results are closer to the cross-over EoS.

This figure is usually shown for identical particles that you can not distinguish, I suggest you can use any other future that is applicable for all particles species. 

S29: not contaminated -> less contaminated

I suggest to remove the last bullet, instead to keep a reference to the figure: CPOD’23 (as you did)

Please separate a bit the text and the figure, they overall each other

S30: plays -> play

Pleae define all symbols mentioned here

Instead of mentioning of properties  of resonances, you can mention that this analysis helps to disctiguise whether a_0 is a tetraquark ro not (but here you need to add title bit more details regarding extracting parameters from Diana)

Add a reference to LL model

S32, instead of the last sentence, please add a reference to the SQM’24 conference 

S33: Title: Femtoscopy - baryons -> Baryon femtoscopy

Remove the repetition: Baryon femtoscopy

Remove „generally"

By measuring the CF’s with knows sources we can probe the interactions: -> Assuming known source function, possible to probe interactions:

Are they repel or attract themselves? -> Do the particle attract or repeal each other? 

S34: Title: Femtoscopy - baryons -> Baryon femtoscopy

S33, 34: you may consider adding some graphics

S34: d_0,f_0 -> d_0, f_0 (add a space)

S35: deuteron lambda -> deuteron-lambda

General comment: if you use greek symbols, do this in your all slides, so lambda -> \Lambda, etc..

Rewrite the numerical values in the math mode, eg. 2.32^{+0.12}_{-0.11} fm

S38:

Chosen results… -> STAR highlights on fluctuations and correlations were shown

I hope this helps, I will go through your slides once more when you implement my comments,

Thanks,

Hanna

Prof. Hanna Zbroszczyk, PhD, DSc, Eng.

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