STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Hanna Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>]

Dear Daniel,

Thank you for incorporating my comments.

General comments:

Check please page numbering, some slides have missing slides numer, please add where necessary.

You use different fonts at different slides (e.g, S19, S22), please make fonts at you presentation consistent

S4. Page number missing.

Remove = at Low /sqrt{…}

S15: add EPD as detector improvement 

S19: 20 GeV should be in one line

S22: add please definitions of variable used (\sigma, radii, etc..)

S22/23: add a reference to the STAR paper

S25: I don’t really get what you mean that model parameters were tuned only to this EoS, I suggest to remove this statement as it may confuse the audience

S26: I am very confused here. 

As your motivation you mentioned at the beginning of your presentation studies of the QCD phase diagram.

The content discussed here should be consistent with the physics motivation.

Nontrivial behavior of \alfa - this statement is very puzzling. Can you be more precise?

Please mention, what do we expect as a signature of critical behavior?

You don't mention any reference which is needed here.

Moreover, I am afraid you will not have much time to go into too many details, so planning of this slide is crucial.

Mate, can you suggest the content fitting to this context?

The leading topic of this talk is exploration of the structure of the QCD phase diagram and the content should be consists with the physics motivation.

S29: please change the figure, as an example: S2 https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/KKCF20240829PWG.pdf  

I hope it helps,

Thanks,

Hanna

Prof. Hanna Zbroszczyk, PhD, DSc, Eng.

E-mail: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl
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Wiadomość napisana przez Wielanek Daniel (via star-cf-l Mailing List) <star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> w dniu 29.08.2024, o godz. 13:49:

Dear All,

I've uploaded never version of my presentation.

Pozdrawiam/Best regards,

Daniel Wielanek

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Od: star-cf-l-request AT lists.bnl.gov <star-cf-l-request AT lists.bnl.gov> w imieniu użytkownika Mate Csanad <csanad AT bnl.gov>
Wysłane: środa, 28 sierpnia 2024 10:04:57
Do: star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov
Temat: Re: [[Star-cf-l] ] STAR presentation by Daniel Wielanek for NTHEP-2024 submitted for review

 

Dear Daniel,

Since this is a centrally invited overview talk, may I ask to include a slide 
about the collision energy (and centrality) dependent Lévy femtoscopy analyses? 
I believe the CPOD talk of Daniel Kincses contains the necessary materials:
https://conferences.lbl.gov/event/1376/contributions/8829/attachments/5136/4936/kincsesd_CPOD2024_talk_v6.pdf
maybe just slide 18 of that talk would be good, showing Figure 8 of this blogpost:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/blog/kincses/Pion-interferometry-Levy-stable-sources-STAR-FXT-energies
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/alpha0_sqrts_fxt.pdf
with an inset showing Figure 6 of this blogpost:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/blog/kincses/Two-particle-interferometry-Levy-stable-sources-sqrtsNN-200-GeV-AuAu-collisions
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/alpha0_npart.pdf
I know you have to make a selection, but maybe this could still have a place in 
your talk.

Thanks, best regards,
Mate

2024. 08. 27. 17:28 keltezéssel, Hanna Zbroszczyk (via star-cf-l Mailing List) írta:
> Dear Daniel,
> 
> Thank you for submitting your presentation in time.
> Please find below my comments for you:
> 
> S1: I suggest adding a one paragraph break between the tittle of your 
> presentation and your name and another one between your name and the name of 
> conference
> 
> S2: I suggest to increase the size of your fonts and to add some content to the 
> right size (figure / graphic / whatever you find as useful)
> 
> S4: I suggest to change = to /rightarrow in all, four places
> 
> Lattice QCD works -> Lattice QCD calculations available
> You may add a bullet that we have cross-over transition here  (high 
> \sqrt{s_{NN}}, low \mu_B)
> Critical Point -> Critical Point? (As it’s not obvious whether it exists)
> 
> S5: I suggest to add that this is the motivation of Au-Au heavy-ion collision 
> programs
> First stage -> High collision energies program: QGP properties
> Second stage -> Beam Energy Scan program I, II (including FXT):
> - onset on deconfinemet,
> - 1st order phase transition
> - Critical Point
> 
> S14: Star Detector -> BES program
> You can show also here the QCD phase diagram from S5 (as it nicely illustrates 
> the coverage of the collision energies)
> 
> S18: I suggest to remove the last bullet, but putting a reference that this 
> figure is taken from CPOD’23
> Increase font size of text please
> 
> S19: as here you have only 2 bullets, I suggest to add them to the previous slide
> 
> S22: define \epsilon_F with a formula
> It will be good to add a conclusion from this slide, e.g. that no phase 
> transition indicated, and that these results are consistent with the scenario of 
> cross-over transition
> Increase the font size please
> 
> S23: CP?-> critical behavior? (Since the location of the CP here is questionable)
> 
> S24: add reference to the figure and add references to EoS included in these 
> calculations
> Except sensitivity to the EoS, please mention that all results are closer to the 
> cross-over EoS.
> This figure is usually shown for identical particles that you can not 
> distinguish, I suggest you can use any other future that is applicable for all 
> particles species.
> 
> S29: not contaminated -> less contaminated
> I suggest to remove the last bullet, instead to keep a reference to the figure: 
> CPOD’23 (as you did)
> Please separate a bit the text and the figure, they overall each other
> 
> S30: plays -> play
> Pleae define all symbols mentioned here
> Instead of mentioning of properties  of resonances, you can mention that this 
> analysis helps to disctiguise whether a_0 is a tetraquark ro not (but here you 
> need to add title bit more details regarding extracting parameters from Diana)
> Add a reference to LL model
> 
> S32, instead of the last sentence, please add a reference to the SQM’24 conference
> 
> S33: Title: Femtoscopy - baryons -> Baryon femtoscopy
> Remove the repetition: Baryon femtoscopy
> Remove „generally"
> By measuring the CF’s with knows sources we can probe the interactions: -> 
> Assuming known source function, possible to probe interactions:
> Are they repel or attract themselves? -> Do the particle attract or repeal each 
> other?
> 
> S34: Title: Femtoscopy - baryons -> Baryon femtoscopy
> 
> S33, 34: you may consider adding some graphics
> 
> S34: d_0,f_0 -> d_0, f_0 (add a space)
> 
> S35: deuteron lambda -> deuteron-lambda
> General comment: if you use greek symbols, do this in your all slides, so lambda 
> -> \Lambda, etc..
> Rewrite the numerical values in the math mode, eg. 2.32^{+0.12}_{-0.11} fm
> 
> S38:
> Chosen results… -> STAR highlights on fluctuations and correlations were shown
> 
> I hope this helps, I will go through your slides once more when you implement my 
> comments,
> 
> Thanks,
> Hanna
> 
> 
> Prof.*Hanna Zbroszczyk*,PhD, DSc, Eng.
> *E-mail*: hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl <mailto:hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>
> Tel: +48 22 234 5851 (office)
> 
> *Address*:
> Warsaw University of Technology
> Faculty of Physics
> Nuclear Physics Division
> Koszykowa 75
> Office: 117b (via 115)
> 00-662 Warsaw, Poland
> 
> 
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