STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Prithwish Tribedy <ptribedy AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Niseem,
   Here are my comments on the abstract -- with these included I sign 
off.

Optional: You may think of editing the title to include "from STAR" or 
"STAR results" or something like that. How about :
"Investigations of the longitudinal broadening of two-particle 
transverse momentum correlations from STAR"

"collisions[1,2]."
-->
"collisions [1,2]."

"investigate (i) the self-correlations associated with the
 definition of the collision centrality (ii) the longitudinal broadening 
of the G2 (∆η, ∆ϕ) correlator (iii) the long range azimuthal dependence"
-->
"investigate: (i) the self-correlations associated with the
 definition of the collision centrality, (ii) the longitudinal 
broadening of the G2 (∆η, ∆ϕ) correlator, (iii) the long range azimuthal 
dependence"


It's not clear what you mean by:
"the self-correlations associated with the definition of the collision 
centrality"
Can you please simplify?

"and the azimuthal harmonics of the G2 (∆η,∆ϕ) correlator "
-->
"and the azimuthal harmonics a_^{pT} of the G2 (∆η, ∆ϕ) correlator"

"as well as simulated calculations using"
-->
"as well as with calculations using "

" These comparisons are expected to reflect the G2 (∆η, ∆ϕ) power to 
differentiate between theoretical models as well as constraining the η/s 
extraction."
-->
"These comparisons are expected to reflect the efficacy of the G2 (∆η, 
∆ϕ) correlator to differentiate between theoretical models as well as to 
constrain the η/s."

Here in the last sentence "differentiate between theoretical models" is 
ambiguous. You need to clarify which aspects of the theoretical models, 
or which physics scenarios will be contrasted.

Best,
Prithwish




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