STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Prithwish Tribedy <ptribedy AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Dear Prabhupada,
 You draft is already in a good shape. Here are my comments on the 
latest version of your proceedings. With these included I sign off.

abstract:
proceeding --> proceedings or contribution

"to the transported quarks effect" --> rephrase like "..contribution 
from the transported quarks.." (transported quarks effect is not clear)

line 2: "collision provides" --> "collisions provide"

line 4: Add "the" before final-state & remove "produced from the medium 
formed in the collision"

line 5: "initial state of the medium and its properties" --> "initial 
stages and hydrodynamic evolution of the medium formed in such 
collisions"

line 8: Comma missing after "Here", "nth" --> the nth", "proxy of" --> 
"proxy for" & add "(\Psi_R)" after "reaction plane"

line 14: Add "quantities characterizing the" before "transport 
properties"

line 15: "Therefore, ....model" --> I don't understand this, why do we 
need to measure v_2 & v_3 simultaneously? It is not clear from this 
para.  Which reference says this ? Cite it again at the end of this 
sentence. If this is about constructing the ratio v_3/v_2^{3/2} and 
therefore you need both -- make it clear here.

line 18: Remove "so" and start a new sentence. Remove "the" before 
"least".

line 19: "considered excelled" --> "considered as excellent"

line 19 and everywhere: "initial stage" --> "initial stages" & revise 
the sentence accordingly.

line 19: "In BES-II" --> "During the RHIC BES-II program"

line 20: "better dE/dx" --> "extended pseudorapidity capabilities, 
better particle identification"

line 22: "The collision event statistics" --> "The statistics of the 
event sample". "at 19.6 GeV" --> "for Au+Au collisions at √sNN=19.6 
GeV".

line 23: "precise" --> "more precise"

line 27: "= pT x \phi - weight" --> "is applied to take care of the 
non-uniform acceptance in pT & \phi".

line 28: "factor" --> "factors for", "is the" --> "is obtained from the"

line 29: "Details on" --> "The details of". "\phi-weight can" --> 
"\phi-weight estimation can". "in [5]" --> "in Ref. [5]" (optional 
comment)

line 31: "with \eta" --> "of \eta". Also, "hemispheres" is not a good 
choice here but I don't have any good alternatives in my mind. Maybe 
"sides".

line 32, 47: Avoid starting sentence with symbols except for the 
captions (optional comment). Add "Here".

line 33: Do you have a reference for "The...BES-I measurement"? If not 
and this is from your analysis then say "We find..."

line 53 & everywhere: "ncq" --> "NCQ". Add "i.e." after "v3" on this 
line.

line 54: remove comma (,) after energy.

Line 60-62: This is the first time you talk about 14.6 GeV data without 
any reference. It reads a bit awkward as you didn't allude briefly in 
the earlier sections of this proceedings. Therefore, please add a 
sentence in line 60 before you talk about 14.6 GeV data "In STAR 
collaboration, we have also analyzed 14.6 GeV data from BES-II program 
(results not shown here)". Also, cite a reference or a document if you 
can.

line 64: I think you need a hyphen (-) between "hydrodynamics & 
motivated". Also, add "of v3/v_2^(3/2)" before "ratio".

line 66 & other places: "weak" --> "a weak"

Figure captions: "centrality events" --> "centrality classes" or 
"centrality selections"

line 72: "internal degrees of freedom" add "valence" here or say 
"valance quark content" to be more clear.

line 74: "may be due to the initial eccentricity in the colliding 
system" --> "driven by the centrality dependence of initial ellipticity"

line 75: "expected from the event-by-event fluctuation" --> "expected to 
driven by initial state fluctuations". This is better as this includes 
nucleon, sub-nucleon, e-by-e geometry that lead to v_3.


Best,
Prithwish



On 2022-10-17 01:06, pdixit via Star-fcv-l wrote:
> Dear Subhash,
> The link to the latest version of the proceeding is
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/ICHEP_proceedings_v3.pdf
> after a small correction in the typo.
>
> Regards,
> Prabhupada
> On 2022-10-17 10:17, pdixit via Star-fcv-l wrote:
> > Dear Subhash,
> > Thank you for the comments and suggestion. The corrected version of
> > the proceeding can be found in the link below. Please have a look.
> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/ICHEP_proceedings_v2.pdf
> >
> > Regards,
> > Prabhupada
> > On 2022-10-16 09:02, subhash via Star-fcv-l wrote:
> > > Dear Prabhupada,
> > >
> > > Nice proceedings. I have a few suggestions for your consideration:
> > >
> > > abstract: add a space between KS0 and Lambda
> > > remove 14.6. You are not showing anything from this energy.
> > > The hydrodynamically motivated ratio ... is presented as a function 
> > > of pT
> > >
> > > line 11: If Psi_n is event plane here, then you need resolution 
> > > factor
> > > in equation 2
> > >
> > > line 13: remove initial
> > >
> > > line 16-17: To overcome this problem, --> I don't understand the
> > > problem here. I think you mean multi-strange hadrons are not affected
> > > by late stage hadronic rescattering. Could you rephrase the sentence.
> > >
> > > line 19: You could elaborate/specify on the detector upgrades and
> > > increase in number of events here.
> > >
> > > line 24-26: I think the "𝜙 − 𝑤𝑒𝑖𝑔ℎ𝑡" is the inverse of dN/d𝜙 right.
> > > First define it then say it is used to flaten the event plane.
> > >
> > > line 26-27: Please rephrase it.
> > >
> > > line 28: Add the the eta regions of sub-events?
> > >
> > > line 35:  particles and anti-particles --> Mention particle species 
> > > here.
> > >
> > > line 48: define what is modified ncq here
> > >
> > > line 53: this could be due to the effect from transported quarks
> > >
> > > line 61: weak dependence on pT above 1.5 GeV/c
> > >
> > > line 68: because its dominant cause is --> may be due to the initial
> > > eccentricity  ....
> > >
> > > line 70:  because its main cause -->  because it is expected from the
> > > event-by-event fluctuation ....
> > >
> > > line 72: which can be attributed to ...
> > >
> > >
> > > I sign off with these addressed.
> > >
> > >
> > > Thanks and regards,
> > > Subhash
> > >
> > >
> > > On 2022-10-11 03:34 AM, webmaster--- via Star-fcv-l wrote:
> > > > Dear star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > > >
> > > > Prabhupada Dixit (prabhupadad AT iiserbpr.ac.in) has submitted a 
> > > > material for a
> > > > review, please have a look:
> > > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61286
> > > >
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