STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Diptanil,

My comment and suggestion can be found below on your nice proceedings.

Title: add "in STAR"

General:
1_ Don't use any italic font through out this proceedings
2_ Fig-1, you mention D-mesons you reconstruct between pT: 5-10 GeV/c; 
but though out the paper you use pT > 5 GeV/c, which one you have used 
for the calculation of radial profile and D tagged jet pT?  Is there any 
counts above pT > 10 GeV/c.


L8: "…reconstruction …" -> "… the reconstruction …"
L18-19:"The partons which give rise to these jets lose energy to the QGP 
medium, either through collisions, or through induced gluon 
bremsstrahlung - a phenomenon known as jet quenching [2]" -> "The 
hard-scattered partons lose energy, either through collisions or through 
medium-induced gluon bremsstrahlung, while traversing through the QGP 
medium "em dash" a phenomenon …"  [no "hyphen"; see usage of "hyphen" 
and "em-dash"]
L16: "…are useful in studying …" -> " …are used to study…"
L17: "One such probe, called jets, manifests …" -> "Jet, one of such 
probes, manifests …"
L21-22: "…in measurements of energy-loss .." -> we do not measure 
"energy-loss" in heavy-ion collisions; RAA, IAA, etc are the way to 
assess that. Please rephrase this statement. ;  "jet-structure " -> "jet 
structure "
L24: "…of the aforementioned parton energy loss …" -> "…of the parton 
energy loss…" [no needed as you are referring in the same sentence]
L25: "An important prediction of QCD, the dead-cone effect was measured" 
- > "The dead-cone effect, as predicted by the QCD, was observed…"  
[here dead-cone is the object in the sentence; "QCD prediction" is extra 
info…];
"…at LHC[], but remains…" -> "… at the LHC[], but this remains… " [LHC 
-> the LHC all places]

"*Presented at Quark Matter 2022…" -> you could bring that to the 
"Acknowledgment" at the end.
L27-29: "Heavy flavor jets at LHC… the parton masses. Therefore…" I 
think this sentence is not needed to mention why it is important at LHC 
and (in the next stentence "the complementary RHIC.." it seems 
downgrading RHIC measurement. Please rephrase this or remove the LHC 
sentence.

 L32: "jet pT spectra" -> "jet transverse momentum (pT) spectra"
L33: "…in D^0 (Dbar^0) meson tagged jet from Au+Au…" -> "…in its tagged 
jets in Au+Au …"

L36: "             ‘Minimum Bias’(MB) " -> no italic and without quotation 
marks;
L37: "		at nucleon-nucleon center of mass energy of  sqrt(s_NN)=200 GeV, 
collected" -> "… at sqrt(s_NN)=200 GeV collected…" [ not needed as you 
mention sqrt(s_NN)=200 GeV; that is enough]

L40: "             the STAR pseudorapidity " -> "the pseudorapidity "
L51: "E_T > 0.2 GeV" mention what is E_T? " are defined using "-> "are 
reconstructed using…"
L52 "FASTJET" -> FastJet"
L58: "…D^0() candidate as a constituent. " -> "… D^0() as one of the 
constituents."
L68: "…finite vertex resolution, based on…" -> "…finite vertex 
resolution based on…"
L73: elpsilon_corr -> can you please elaborate? How do you calculate 
from all the above contributions ?  Need some info here.

Eq.1 : Can you give some space between N_evt, pT, dPt, etc?

In Eq.2 and L79:  "r" -> make it italic (because  r has some value) and 
elsewhere

L93:  "  … ‘single-particle’ … "  ->       " ..single-particle…" ;
        " embedding single-particle jets in MB Au+Au events" Can you 
please correct me if you have embed (single-particle carrying whole 
energy) a jet or multiple jets in MB events? From your statement you 
embedded multiple jets in an event.
L94: Mention your jet matching criteria
L98: Njet -> "$N_{\rm jet}$
L102: "b) systematics from …" -> Need to mention what you have used from 
this ref[9], for example, systematic procedures, method, or directly you 
use percentages of uncertainty to calculate systematic uncertainty
L104: "…are estimated…" -> "…are determined…"
L108-109: "…is shown in the left panel of Figure 2, as a function of … 
Au+Au collisions." ->" …is shown as a function of … Au+Au collisions in 
in the left panel of Figure 2."
L111: "		The nuclear modification factor, R_CP…" -> Define R_CP in this 
sentence.

Fig.2: In the caption or in the text, you need to mention about blue and 
green uncertainties bands due to N_coll.

L113-115; This whole sentence you can shorten by saying " The D^0 tagged 
jet R_cp shows a strong suppression in central collisions than in 
mid-central collisions at low pT,jet."
L116: "…bins, which …" -> "…bins which …"

Fig-3: Caption: use period at the end.

L118:  bring "in the left panel of Figure 3" at the end of the sentence; 
 (r) -> ($r$)
L125: "In this proceedings, the first…" - "The first…"
L128: "…collisions, with the …" -> "…collisions with…"
L130: "		, which is qualitatively  different from inclusive jets. " Make 
a new sentence. "This trend is qualitatively different from the 
inclusive jet measurements at RHIC.
L130: "The radial profiles …" -> "The radial profile of D^0 meson in its 
tagged jets …"   ; "bins, within…" -> "…bins within…"


Cheers
Nihar


On 2022-07-06 20:05, Diptanil Roy via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hi everyone, please find the first draft of the Quark Matter 2022
> proceedings above. Please let me know your comments on the same. The
> last date for submitting the proceedings is August 1, 2022.
>
> Thank you.
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