STAR HardProbes PWG

[Barbara Trzeciak <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com>]

Hi Youqi,

please find below my comments and suggestions for your nice slides.

Cheers,

Barbara

General:

- Enlarge a bit font of the slide headers.

- I would introduce Q and M, and then SoftDrop variables more clearly, e.g. on slide 4 or 5. Or add an additional slide (please also see my suggestion below what can be moved to the backup).

- Make sure you are fine in terms of time.

- s11: This slide is quite busy. If you introduce Q, M  and z_g earlier, you can remove them from this slide. And then you also don't need slide 10. Also, you can reduce the font of the references.

- s12: I would move it to the backup, you have already a lot of materials in this presentation.

- s25-26: suggest to merge them.

- s27: "(For most observables, our data and simulation agree within statistical uncertainty)" - this is not clear to me, you don't really show this on the slide.

- s28: please check your timing. If the presentation is too long, you can move it to the backup.

- s32: Type in the legend of the right-hand-side plot: Blue for Herwig should be |Q| > 0.15

- s33: It's nice to present a result figure at the end, but it's so small that I think it will bring much here - so I would remove it.

On Thu, Sep 29, 2022 at 9:41 PM webmaster--- via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Youqi Song (youqi.song AT yale.edu) has submitted a material for a review, 
please have a look:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61209

Deadline: 2022-10-11
---
If you have any problems with the review process, please contact 
webmaster AT www.star.bnl.gov
_______________________________________________
Star-hp-l mailing list
Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov
https://lists.bnl.gov/mailman/listinfo/star-hp-l