STAR HardProbes PWG

[Veronica Verkest <vverkest AT gmail.com>]

Hi Yi,

Thank you for the feedback. I have implemented the changes and uploaded the new abstract to Drupal.

I am unsure if I am supposed to submit this abstract (once approved) through the site or if I am supposed to send it to the organizers, on the site it says "Note that the speakers selected by the experimental collaborations which talks have been already allocated by the Program Committee do not need to send abstracts." Perhaps someone else has a better idea?

Thanks,

Veronica

On Fri, Feb 3, 2023 at 10:03 PM Yi Yang <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com> wrote:

Hi Veronica,

Thanks a lot for the updated version. I only have two minor comments for your consideration. 

 -L8: their measurements --> the measurements 

 -L9: remove one "with"

 

Cheers,

Yi

On Sat, Feb 4, 2023 at 6:13 AM Veronica Verkest via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Barbara and Nihar,

I greatly appreciate your feedback and revisions and have updated the pdf on Drupal. The biggest change was lines 8-9, where I worked to combine both suggestions; I think this sentence sounds good now, but please let me know if you feel otherwise.

Thanks,

Veronica

On Wed, Feb 1, 2023 at 3:51 AM Barbara Trzeciak via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Veronica,

Below are my additional comments to your nice abstract. 

- L6-7: Either remove it or: In p+p collisions, hard probes provide important test of perturbative QCD. (and then move after the "They are produced from the hard..." sentence proposed by Nihar)

- L10:  about hot and cold QCD phenomena ->  about hot and cold QCD phenomena, respectively. 

Cheers,

Barbara

On Wed, Feb 1, 2023 at 5:58 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Veronica,

Thank you for preparing this hard probes abstract for Rencontres de
Moriond conference.
I tried to modify a few sentence to have better paraphrase. Please
consider my suggestions below.

With these implemented I sign off.


Line 5-6: "Heavy flavor particles and high transverse momentum (pT)
probes are useful for studying quantum chromodynamics (QCD)."
-> "Heavy flavor and jet are probes to study the hot-dense quantum
chromodynamics (QCD) matter known as Quark-Gluon Plasma (QGP)."
Here, high-pT is not a probe, and as you want to discuss mainly on QGP
so it would be better to introduce here directly.

Line6-7: "Measurements…theoretical models" Not required, Please drop it.

Line7-8: "Heavy quarks are used as a proxy for the hard scattered
particle as they carry information from early in the collision."
->"They are produced from the hard scattering early in the collision and
hence witness the QGP evolution."
I find the meaning was not coming out properly so I suggest above
sentence.

Line9-10: "Since these hard probes interact with QCD medium, comparison
of measurements between small systems (such as p+p and p+A) and
heavy-ion collisions provide information about hot and cold QCD
phenomena."
-> "Since these hard probes interact with the QCD medium, their
measurements in heavy-ion collisions (Au+Au and d+Au) and their
comparison with the vacuum like p+p collisions can provide information
about the hot-dense and cold QCD medium."

Line11-13: "Specifically, suppression of jet and heavy quark yields is
observed as a function of centrality in heavy-ion collisions due to
interaction of the colored probe with the quark gluon plasma (QGP)."
-> "The observation of heavy flavor and jet yield suppression in
heavy-ion collisions relative to p+p collisions at RHIC energy is due to
their interaction with the QGP medium."

Line15: "a variety of" -> "different"

Line16: "…from multiple collision systems…" -> ""…from Au+Au and p+Au
collision systems…"
Please mention what are those multiple collision systems.

L17: "Jet yields and substructure measurements are be presented for
various system sizes and centralities."
-> "Jet yields and its substructure measurements are presented for
various system sizes and centralities."

You may add one more sentence as this is a STAR hard probes overview
talk.
"Finally, I shed light on the STAR data taking plan for upcoming years
in the direction of the precision measurements."


Cheers
Nihar


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